her aching joints
do not signify
how many times
she has come together,
and yet remains
so incomplete;
chipped at and moulded;
a model mother, wife,
friend and
now
your lover
she lays,
stuttered...
and lies,
incessantly,
chattering
about everything,
just to spend
a moment,
clenched
and incomplete:
a work in progress...
A contest entry
- The Beauty of Being Unfinished by Zayra Yves.
1100 points, ended November 30, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ah, I feel like this time and time again. So many times I think it has come together, and I am who I am finally, or again, I don't know, and then I realize I am starting again. At my dawn over and over again. In fact, my most recent poem was about this, yet again claiming to be the finished project.
Very well done Elaine, I can't wait to read more.
S -
still enjoy this work of art...
thinking of you
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I stopped by your page to see if I had missed anything new posted by you, and I was right! November though?! What a delayed reaction
lol
This is wonderful - makes me think that, perhaps, we are always incomplete and looking in all the wrong places for fulfilment
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it's those circles of life that keep going round and round..Your summation is absolutely perfect!
elaine, it's great to be reading you again, I've been MIA for ever it seems, but am finally returned, only to find you seem to be experiencing the same
I hope life is treating you kind
love and blessings, Sandi
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I havn't been here for sometime Elaine, but I am glad I came back and visited, this is a beautiful poem Elaine-simply put xxxx
Miss you hunny xx
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me neither babe - no time these days drop in once a week if i get the chance!
thanks for dropping by tho'
always appreciated
love to you x
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This is great Elaine! You are such a fine writer. It definitely is on theme with the contest and it is full of emotion too.
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this is wonderful. somehow it makes it feel okay to be incomplete.
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this is beautiful Elaine
al
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Hey - I know this feeling.
Though, sometimes just an inkling of incomplete can outweigh the completeness offered from incomplete ideas.
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Miss Elaine! It's so good to see you back here where we can watch the materpiece in motion! Lovely poem that celebrates that fluidity of a woman's life as it is lived and created!
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i like the idea. the poem too. if i were you i'd take off the first "work in progress".
but this is certainly a very good piece.
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you are a most beautiful work in progress and should be held for those extra moments and special times
tis beautimous!!!! oh yes!
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perfect for this contest, and yes, this is how we are, how life is... good to see you back here again, Elaine
~ Nicolette
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is so real! I like it (:
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I like where you took the prompt...sequences/sequential...work in progress...I feel the same...I am glad to see you posting again....Well done.
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