When you called me,
I woke up in the night,
a thousand miles away,
I could feel your light.
When you called me,
a whisper in my heart,
that warmed me to the soul,
every moment were apart.
When you called me,
In your loving way,
playfulness in your eyes,
I never want it to go away.
When you called me,
with tears in your eyes,
I wraped my arms around you,
and share with you soft sighs.
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When you called me
A contest entry
- When you called me... by 2lullabyhaven.
650 points, ended November 19, 2008, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow, this is grand...thanks for your entry and good luck
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Nice write. For me, being called in the night can induce panic at first but, sometimes, it leads to a feeling of intimacy. A person actually calls at that ungodly hour and, if it's not an emergency, there is closeness there.
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NIcely written. . .
Good use of words, and some good imagery. Not bad at all, it just didn't grab my attention right away. It was a drifting snowflake of a poem and well written. Was very beautiful I just thought it lacked intensity. Good job.
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very nice, i like that you started all the stanza with "when you called me" it added something special to the piece, great job, best of luck in the contest
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This is very heart touching. To care for one and have them touch you so, that their call, over so many miles, can still be heard by you.
Joann
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