Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

freedom is a road

 

There is a path
that few know
and yet many take.
Everyone expresses their happiness,
even though it's fake.

Traveling down the dirt path,
where all seems good and decent,
the truth behind the "hello's"
is that everyone's hiding their demons.

I know of a path,
that if you ask,
I could show you the way.
It won't be the easiest,
you may have to fight
and lose some blood and sweat
to get your way.

But if you don't mind
and you'll do what it takes,
then I'll show you the road
to freedom,

keep going, it's this way.

 

Author notes

Lowercase Prelude

Prompt: Freedom Is A Road

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 6 of 6

  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    November 15, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Oh how we are fake infront of one another, I love that stanza the most as we all do hide our demons and, some form of salvation would be good of course, but we would never take it as we fear truth too much. We fear change also, which disables us to be open to the other things life can give us if we would just let it.


  • Little Miss Mental
    November 6, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This was wonderful! And it holds true....freedom isn't always on the easiest road...it takes time and effort to achieve. Very nicely done, and the best of luck to you in the contest. ♥Rhi


  • catalyst.
    November 5, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    beautiful. I loved the imagery here, very relatable.

    Beautiful.

  • michaeline
    November 5, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Life takes one down many roads.some good and some bad.Our will to live and to be free of our inner demons is what we all wish for.sometimes there are many mountains you must fight your way up to have any chance at surviving at all.I like your point of view and the way that you write.You have talant.You were easy to follow and to relate to.The reader could get encouragement in this .Great job.And good luck in this contest it is a winner in my book.


  • badnovocaine
    November 4, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Its so true what you said in your write, all of it. I liked how you said you may have to fight and lose some blood and sweat.
    Because that is determination right there!! That should be what its all about, and maybe people today (well some people not all though) have lost those values and this poem is showing not to give up.
    I liked this very much it was an interesting write.


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    November 4, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    I love it...

    It is so very true that to be truly free from anything you must work hard at it and undertake a lot of bullshit sometimes to overcome the obstacles life throws at you. Fantastic take on the prompt. I enjoyed. ~Gypsy~

1 - 6 of 6