Love isnt what
it says at all...
My destiny says
I'm destined to fall.
People aren't what
people seem...
My destiny says
I'm destined to dream
In those dreams
that no one knows of...
My destiny says
I'm destined to love.
People don't know
what I'm destined to do...
My destiny says
I'm destined for you
Look inside my eyes
what do you see...
If destiny says
then destiny shall be... ...
A contest entry
- prewrites round contest #1 by serenity silvermoon.
425 points, ended December 27, 2008, 86 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i reall like this poem and how you repeated "destiny says ......"
really cute poem.
The only thing id change is,
Love isnt always what
people say it is at all...
My destiny says
I'm destined to fall.
People aren't always what
they seem...
My destiny says
I'm destined to dream
but thats just my opinion.
either way very nice poem.
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wow, an inspiring read to allow things that happen, happen. it makes u think about what your destiny could be.
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great job
love it
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Oh so soft and loving! Great job!
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great job,you wrote it beautifully
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Beautiful Sentiments...
Thank you for sharing your muse with all of us, and for the thoughtfulness with which you wrote this inspiring poem. 
I'm wishing you all the best in all you do!! Peace always, xx Cyn xx 
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OMG...You've rendered me speechless. So beautiful.
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Wonderful
Very creative and well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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I really enjoyed reading this poem. It goes from affecting yourself to affecting multiple people. It remeinds me of just plain hope. Hope to do anything. It seems lyrical in a way. Very simple, yet so intense. I wouldn't change anything on it. Good job.
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Philosophy Spoken. Nah, but intriguingly diversed, manipulation of the eyes. Ohh, love, its so illusional. Whether it feels real, or its afar and it urnes back. It can decept whatever you wish is to believe is true and is going to happen. Its quite dark and twisted, love. Its more devilish and than prestiegic, but a good write of its redemptional prose. I enjoyed it so much.
Sincerely,
Deathwolf Tasagka
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A lovely and almost playful poem ..;
building in intensity. Such a clever write.
Once again: a good example of simplicity, linked to form enchanting poetry.
Well done!
Myra -
The great thing about destiny is we never know where she will lead us.We will have to wait and see what destiny will be.Good poem, Ros
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Everything's fine.. but am a bit confused as to why
"My destiny says
I'm destined to fall."
Why fall? -
LoVe It!!!
great write. u got some major talent! poems on love usually turn out to be the best lol
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Thoughtful and thought making
I like it...though I don't rely on Destiny much...she can help me sometimes...but other times I want to give her a noogie...my emotion to this is it makes me think and ponder life,love and everything in between.
You were consistent with what you were saying though you used destiny a lot when using word choice but in this case it was appropriate...I give my thumbs and big toes up for you
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A very interesting philosophy of love... this is an area that I've had my share of troubles with, dear poet!
A very nice poem. *just need an apostrophe in ln 1 -- "isn't"
Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Zach -
One of lifes secret we do not know the answer, for many have spent yerars searching for the answers to destiny, Why this? why Not that? If i had gone the other way, this accident would not have happened, and so on. We wonder think and reflect . I liked your thoughts and the way you shared them. Keep penning, my friend.
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Awe.
I liked this alot.
Sounds like you are in a dream here, And i could so totally relate.
I have been lost in dreams. And Sometimes i have wanted to know what my destiny is.
Great write!
-Mandi
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You are indeed a dreamer ...
but one pondering the cause and effect of what is predestined, thus taking it a step further. Very neat write, Raymond.
Thank you for adding me as a favorite. I am glad you like my poetry.
Write on!
Love
Myra
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i like this. it's simply written and not full of pretentious fluff. Good work. Stop by my place, too...
Love, lane
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Intriguing
Can you change destiny or are you destined to make those changes...hummm -
Very cure and very intersting philosophy of this life is portrayed in wonderful poetic manner..I love it..well done...and thanks for sharing it..my friend..
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Your words speak such truth, rhyming is excellently portrayed and it flows well. Great write for sure, to follow ones destiny is to follow heart and dreams. Sometimes when one is not sure what path to take, destiny will lead the way.
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Destiny
at times a fatal look at life . At others times ..oh the glory... follow your desting poet.
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Outstanding
This is a great little poem that looks at fate in an original way. I liked the repetition and the way you devloped the theme- each stanza following logically from the previous one. Over all a compelling poem with strong flow.
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Beautiful
It's got a hook that kept me reading it.It reminded me of a song I wrote once.It's wonderful,keep it up. -
Lovely little poem you have going on, very dreamy and romantic. Usually it bothers me when lines are repeated but this flowed quite nicely and I can relate to it alot right now.
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i really like this one.. it has so much feeling in it..feeling i could once relate to..wow!
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ooohhh love!...
I guess I'll be curious to know if that was the case... LOL... really nice... M Beth
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