Your the only thing it would hurt me to loose
That is something I just wouldn't choose
We have been through it all
Escaping to each other when things got to hard
Times were always changing like the flip of a card
Not caring about what others would say
Just helping each other to get through the day
When I lost my mom you held me so tight
When everything went wrong you made them right
I could not have made it without your love
You were sent to me from Heaven above
If I lost it all and no one was left
I would beg to keep you with each dying breath
My cancer will end me but with each ragged breath
We'll cling to each other until my death
We will meet each other on the other side
Our love we feel we will not have to hide
It may not be right to love each other so
After death my soulmate Our love will still grow
Author notes
written by michaeline
A contest entry
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Comments
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ahhh you see in my thoughts death can not separate those whose hearts are truly joined together. For a physical body is not needed at all then. Just the love. Good interesting write you have here. Thanks for sharing this with us
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This was so sad; I can't help but wonder as to the background of the poem, ie is it speaking about a couple who are different colours, or too big an age gap - or, why their love is wrong;
however you told a very tragic tale here yet told it well, I did feel now and then that the rhymes were a little forced but not even to interefere hugely with the reading of the poem!
Couple of small corrections;
"Your the only thing it would hurt me to loose" <-- you're not your
"Escaping to each other when things got to hard" <-- too hard
Thank you for entering
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thanks for the entry
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I agree with nicole....really, i'm not just buttering up so i don't win!
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love and fidelity are notable virtues
well done! Extremely well written poem, on descriptive level and emotional as well.
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Beatifully sad! Cancer is such a terrible disease
and I am sorry to hear of your illness. I hope that you do well with this entry here. Good luck to you!
Jeremy0826 -
Thank you for your beautifully written piece, Josie
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Very Beautiful write...can feel the emtions with words
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wow! the title blew me away! and the content amazed me! It made a tear roll down my cheek! thank you! very beautiful! good luck!
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Compelling...
I was shocked at the revelation of the cancer; the love was familiar; the story of the bonding hearts through thick and thin...But the cancer disclosure adding a demension of pain and depth that was not there until that point (well, for me anyway). What a descript write. You did an excellent job on this piece. Bravo! And if it is not fiction, it is even more moving and compelling. Thanks for sharing this with me.
AsIThink...
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Very Powerful Write!
This is so touching! I never expected the last two stanzas. It is beautiful tribute and expression of love and devotion. Makes me think of the "Titanic" you know the part where they are in the water?
It is very moving. Good read and thanks for sharing,
castaway
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I really like this, very sweet.
oh btw thanks for the comment on my poem
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One person effects so many
their golden smile brings such joy,
their feared absents paralyzes us.
In this life we need to walk with someone who is true.
Your writing touches my heart.
Are you ill lass?
I am here if you need to talk.
I have lost many close to me ...
maybe I can comfort you in some way.
If i knew the way,
I would take you home
We may be a single drop of rain,
but we will remain,
and we'll be back again.
much love my sister,
Lowell
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