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Flying away from capture

Her dress is ratty,
Mangled,
Snared.

The ropes are tight,
Bemired,
Crimson.

The wounds are bleeding,
Prickling,
Aching.

Her scars are aged,
Colorless,
Undesired.

She will run,
Scamper,
Scramble.

For the freedom before her,
Unreachable,
Unattainable.

Her captors drag her,
Shrieking,
Clambering.

Back to the dungeons,
Begrimed,
Contaminated.

Where she'll elude,
Flee,
Vanish.

Finally free,
Unimprisoned,
Departed.

Her dark past,
Acherontic,
Malign.

Flying out behind her,
Aflare,
Flowing.

She is running,

Liberated,

Simply gone..............

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  • Antebellum
    July 27
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    wonderful wording.
    thanking so much for entering this,
    good luck.
    "She is running,

    Liberated,

    Simply gone.............."

    absoultly love this part.


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    You've capture the picture in a different way...

    where the lady in the photo chose to be where she's at and no one can put her down without her consent and jaded of it all, she wants to breakfree of the chains/ribbon [an extra baggage] that bind her and she only needs to decided where she wants to lead her life to...

    I love what I am getting here. It gives me insight and a sense of perspective...this made me realized why I am fascinated with the photo.

    ps, I love the quote below there on the comment

    Thank you for sharing your talent


    Anna Lee

  • TrippinBTM
    November 4, 2008

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    "freedom starts between the ears" -Ed Abbey. I like your poem, had a sort of cadence to it, drew me through it.