My heart is gone I know not where
A bloodless silence rings
Like paean bells on raven air
That herald the rush of wings
I feel a silky numbness there
A smothering of wings
I cannot tell who took it
And yet I know its gone
Freed from the wars that shook it
Invited to the dawn
But myself, whose heart forsook it
Will never see its dawn:
The silence rings, the numbness stays
And forward ticks the night
And horribly, by moonlight rays
The cavern is alight
The cavern where my heart once was
Outlined in bitter light
Now, now my mouth can only say
My heart is gone tonight.
Author notes
This is one of my favorite poems I've written because it speaks of how I feel my heart must be gone sometimes bcause I feel so deeply, or else it's silent because of that. . .
A contest entry
- Best Writes Since 1st November 2008! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
700 points, ended November 15, 2008, 64 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Great imagery
and poetry. I can see once again why I have made you a favorite. Sometimes, the syllable count is off, but the lines are esquisite. -
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yes I realized about the syllables but I was trying to sound somewhat like Poe and I have observed in his work that he is quite loose with the syllable count. And it just came that way. . .
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this borders on heartbrake but at the same time you really stuck to the emotion part. its a really wonderful poem, i loved reading it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Wowzer!
Well deserved gold! Your use of archaic language (forsook and paean) and romantic imagery brought you the recognition you deserve. I will learn from you.
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oh my, I am being heaped with praise. .
thank you thank you thank you! Y'know, that poem took a long time to do what I wanted - but it worked! And I do believe I'll learn from you too. . . 
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This is great! Thank you for entering
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Great stuff!!!
Great narrative, rhythm & flow with great emotional depth & passion within a wonderful rhyme scheme that enthralled throughout...
And very worthy of the Gold shiney you are sporting there...
Well penned, well versed, well done!!!
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Congratulations on a very well deserved Gold, a beautiful poem...Sue
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I think this is truly beautiful... I am normally really apposed to repetition but this kind is beautiful. I can feel each word and relate to it all. Love the form you used, I also love the choice of words. It flows lovely.
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thank you thank you thank you! Egar Allan Poe is one of my poetic heroes, y'see. Hope you're well, Midnight-x-Rose
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