Don’t ask me to be your fucking friend now!
Now that you need someone to help you!
Where the hell were you when I need you?
Where the hell were you when my world fell apart!?
Let me think for a minute now…
You were too wrapped up in your own damn life!
Unable to see that I was begging for help!
Where the fuck were you I needed my friends?
Playing stupid high school games!
While I sunk deep into depression over that tragedy
I don’t give a flying fuck about you anymore!
Don’t you dare look to me for friendship now
When you were nowhere when I needed you most!
I bet you don’t know what the fuck I’m talking about!
Do you even remember my crisis that year?
Don’t you dare ask me to be your friend now!
When you couldn’t fucking see my pain then!
Think hard, can you even remember!?
Did you know that he jumped out a window?
Do you remember where I was when I found out?
Did you even ask me a fucking thing!?
Did you ever offer me your friendship?
That’s why I can’t fucking forgive and forget!
Why I never want to be your friend!
You weren’t there when I need you the most!
Don’t you ask for that courtesy from me!
Don’t ask me to be your goddamn friend now!
Now that you’re the one who needs the help!
Cause, honey, they just can’t compare!
My world fucking fell apart that day!
All I wanted was my friends' support!
Even if you try now it's too little, too fucking late!
Author notes
this is a contest entry asking for big emotion, it is by far the angriest thing i've ever written. a friend of mine had killed himself my last semester of high school, and i was forced to find out who my real friends were.
a few years later some of the people who i discovered were not my real friends were good friends with my bf at the time, i wrote this to try and get my emotions out to deal with them, but it didn't really work.
idon't usually swear when i write, but this is pure anger and i feel it was needed.
this is my first attempt at breaking this into stanzas so if you have any advise on how to make it work better, please tell me
A contest entry
- Big Emotion... by Walking Oxymoron.
550 points, ended November 22, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hate me today by Til the Day I Die.
600 points, ended April 2, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
is it too much?
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this is what i'm looking for the words that will sting and you my freind have found it. -
can i steal this poem lol. some of the lines are exactly how i am feeling towards friends of mine.
i really liked this. i love venting poetry. its my favorite -
It's certainly big emotion, and I can assure you I know a bit abot how you feel...
I lost who I thought was my best friend through something too. My Mum had cancer and my 'friend' was too wrapped up in herself to care about me. I asked for help and recieved nothing. The one time she did come down from where she lived she got angry because my sister called. (Understadning here that my sister is 9, it was a thursday- the days I usually had her, she was crying, and also about to lose her mum.) Yes, my friend got angry and when I tried to explain the situation, my friend (who studied childcare!) said that she didn't care. And that I was 'always pulling stufff like this'
So yeah, i wasn't happy. And I've also discovered who my friends really are. My Mum has just been told (like two days ago) that she's in remission- but I still don't talk to 'that friend'
I'm pleased you've written about your anger, and I hope the pain subsides for you.
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Very effective!
This should have (in this Contest) been recognized for the STRENGTH of its emotion, if for nothing else.
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Now this is really big emotion, you may not think it has helped, but I would bet it felt good while you were writing it. That would be a first step.
Very Good...Best wishes in the contest
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This is very angry so it does give the "Big emotion"
Good luck in the contest!
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oh i like it.. i know how all that feels...
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this is intense..
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this is really good. it is really angry for sure. but i think thats a good thing :]
Sometimes you need to be extremely angry to get the feelings out.
sorry to hear about your loss. I can't really think of comforting things to say because when that happens nothing can be said to make things easier.
I'm glad your finding out who your true friends are.
thank you for the comment
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Wonderful Poem!!!!
Wow, Powerful poem. I think we all feel this emotion about someone throughout our lives. Very vivid and great imagery. Take care, Sandy
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Intesity at its richest!
I love it! It's raw, and powerful. My only regret I feel is someone with nuch passion has been hurt a few too many times, no one should have to go what you been through...of course I could be wrong...you could also be releasing pent-up energy. However, a very emotional read...almost speachless. I love the fact that you wrote exactly how your were feeling. Wow!
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this was a lot of pent-up rage toward a few certain people more than being hurt repeatedly
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Wonderful
Very powerful write. So very well expressed. Thank you for sharing.
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now that is raw emotion in poetry, and, a rant.
You have nothing to cover it up and nothing to make the reader technical - you just have it BAM in your face and that can sometimes be a really cool affect with poetry here.
I actually felt the swearing was a little overused because i had read it so much when it came again it felt really jaded and less strong - I actually think it would be better with just a few key - selected cusses.
Good job getting your feelings out...that is really the target of poetry I feel.
And sorry to hear about your friend..sometimes, we are forced to deal with our lost friendships, and I have felt like this at time to time...it is not pretty! No wonder your so angry!
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I think we all have times we feel like swearing, and sometimes it just seems the right thing, although it's tough, but if it helps to write it down, I think it's a good thing. Then try to let it go...
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Your feelings show after I read this. The pain is right there...angry...bitter...hostile. The energy shows in this. Good job!
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now THAT is intensity of feelings right there...
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Wow! This is incredible, I can't even count how many times you gave me chills. I felt your pain streak through me like an unwelcome friend and I could feel your anger continue to swell with every line I absorbed! It almost made me lean back as if their was an energy current coming at me from my screen. What a phenomenal success!
Blue~
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