Said the man dressed from head to toe in a vauge varnish
Chemical solvents may strip your skin
But not blood soaked cloth
Or crosses made of tofu
Beware of God- His kung-fu grip is legend
And all men who pretend otherwise
Spend their lives alone with themselves
Tricked into wells by voices of angels swelling with such sweet tales of Hell
How all roads lead to Maui
Beautiful souls sunbathing, surrounding with their salvation surf and sand
Tipsy whispering- Tenderness is worshipped in the heart here
Every man and woman belongs to one another
A tower exists brick by brick in a constant state of wonderment
Behind every wall lies a puppet show, strings like tentacles
Working union time converting your heart into a bathroom stall
Inbetween clouds there are waterfalls of forgiveness so that air tastes rich
Faith's lost and dodging bullies who demand lunch money
Three hundred and two days worth enough for a domed-hearse-mobile
Who grinds bones and creates art upon the spines of finite tomes of love?
Not I, these eyes hang with gore intact downward from bluefire skies
Blind and bound these hands stroke my only lonely skin
Making music that stuns from my tattered scarred sweet organ
Author notes
This is either the single best, or single worst thing I have ever written. So, did it stun you.....
Written January 31st, 2004
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This is a great poem thank you for telling me about it it is so smooth it flowes and I swallowed every word it is truly a work of art
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Are all your poems' titles about big phallices?
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wonderful
I liked this: the unigue imagery, the message. Poems of religion are some of the best poems, especially the ones that speak truth. I like the wit you've included: "Beware of God- His kung-fu grip is legend." It's interesting, and new. Your words really allow a person to invision what you were thinking.
-Renee -
Awe, Mike, it's wonderful! No wonder you have no life, your writing poetry all the time. Thats ok, because I'd rather you write poetry than work at Mcdonalds.
Very great poem and I loved it.
Love,
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"Beware of God- His kung-fu grip is legend
And all men who pretend otherwise
Spend their lives alone with themselves
Tricked into a well by voices of angels singing such sweet tales of Hell"
This is the first time I've read any of your writings, and I must say that I am impressed. This is a very well-written piece full of, I don't know. I want to say bitterness, but I don't think that's the right word... Anyway, like Bardock said, the imagery that you use to get your point across is so apropos. However, I think a little differently than to think religion is ridiculous. It does serve a purpose... Not only does it give hope to those who have none, it brings people together under one name and allows for a greater bond between these people.
To quote Hamlet... "There are more things in Heaven or Hell than are dreamt of on earth Horatio." There are things here that cannot be explained by science... always keep an open mind, it doesn't help to blindly follow a cause (not saying that you are, just advice so you're wiser for the wear...). Anyway, keep up the good work and I'll catch you on the flip side.
Keep up the good fight; it's all we have left...
The Rev -
Dazed.
Heh. Um. I kinda like it and dislike it. Har har, but overall, goodly written.
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i like this poem.
its very . . . dang.
i cant think of the word.
well, great write and keep up the good work!
~gracy~ -
This is the best thing I've read in a long time. Thank goodness you're already promoting it or I'd have to make a feeble attempt to promote it myself (me and my 21 points x.x)
Pointing out the downfalls of religion, the rediculousness of the dreams and promises of heaven and the punishment of hell, without being blatently insulting... As memo said, this was somewhat humorous, but at the same time it carries an extremely strong message. You chose the best possible ways to say everything... waterfalls of forgiveness making the air taste rich, things like that, are just brilliantly phrased. This is definetly going on my bookmark list, and being applauded... makes me want to read your other stuff.
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haha this was pretty funny. I liked the part where you wrote that God has the best fon fu grip...funny...lol. ..Good write and keep up the good work.
jason
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