Here we gather all thinking of you
Sharing our memories to help us through
Your time on earth has come and gone
Your unconditional love lingers on
I'm going to miss your warm, strong embrace
I can still see the clever grin on your face
Across the room you would wink your eye
And I can hear you telling me not to cry
Your heart of gold fought the good fight
You survived many trials, held your family tight
Your work and struggles are over and done
The best part of your life has just begun
As I continue this life and its tests
I know you want me to do my best
I will show others unconditional love
As you and the others watch from above
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really wonderful
This is a very heart-wrenching, evocative poem. It is very well-structured. I like the four, four-lined stanzas. Its very soul beautiful and the feelings evoked are earnest. Every stanza is subtly themed and they blend seamlessly into one another which is what I like most about the poem.
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Hi Anya !!
This is a wonderful poem and tribute
to your Great Uncle , a splendid read thank you !
Best wishes & hugs !! Friend Easy
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Very nice.
I do hope that you expressed this sentiment in the days of living as well.
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wonderful written memorial!
i'm sure that this was a blessing to max as he seems to have been a blessing to you. i like the hope conveyed in the idea that, 'the best part of your life has just begun'...and it's nice to get an authentic glimpse into the heart of the poet! more than well done!!
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Superlative
I got one word: excellent. Flow, rhyme meaning. this has the lot. Three clappies for sure.
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Makes me wonder who is max... great Poem with a nice flow... Your friend in poetry.. JackReed3...
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Max is my Great Uncle
and I do mean Great
by more than just position in the family
He is truly an unconditionally loving person and spirit
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This was great! It made the reader sad at first, but then comforted them with Max. This was wonderful and certainly a pleasure to read.
This was my favorite part:
I'm going to miss your warm, strong embrace
I can still see the clever grin on your face
Across the room you would wink your eye
And I can hear you telling me not to cry
And it was my favorite because I can relate to it and I felt the embrace as I read it. Thank you so much for sharing this with me it left me feeling warm and fuzzy inside
~Docteh
P.S. I will return the favor of your other comment after gym.
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WOW! this is really beautiful. a very touching poem. it moved me deeply. so inspiring and very hopeful. i loved how you ended this piece. amazing write, keep penning
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brilliant!!
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I really like this. It initially appears fairly straightforward, but it has some interest-piquing quirks. I'm referring specifically to lines six and twelve. "clever grin" strays far from generic--most common in poems are rather cliche adjectives like "happy" and its various synonyms that are less personal. The word "clever" is, well, clever--it indicates something more than just a "happy" grin, suggesting to me that the character is remembered for more than just kindness. "Clever" says more: that he was particularly creative and also playful. It really is a powerful adjective. Line twelve is also worth noting, indicating that his passing away is not just an end. This line doesn't look shallow or bland to me--it suggests more that others' lives are affected, that his life inspires the people who knew him, and his passing does not represent the end of all things, or of he himself. Rather, it suggests to me that he has allowed others to start the best of their lives, just by being remembered for the person he is. Beautiful poem.
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absolutely amazing, bravo
incredible, amazingly done, i can feel the pain, and i can relate in everyway, if u ever get the chanc you shold read my poem, Why did you have to leave, im sure you would enjoy it
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what an absolutley beautiful poem, you really have put something admirable/adorable into words. Your poetry gets better evry time...
Keep writing!
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this seems to be really blan for the event your writing about. I thought the word choice was weak and read like a obit. It seems like your emotion is dead which might have been one of the theams behind this poem im not the writer so i cant say. This was a good write but could be a great write if it just needs a face lift. Keep up the good work.
Fim Fivver
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amazing anya, i know that hes proud of you and watching over you. remember, to embrace life. don't go through life faster than your guardian angel can fly :]]
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awww i really like this poem. keep up the poetry. love you much. tay
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The dear ones, wise and unselfishly kind, we miss terribly. When they pass they leave a gap in our hearts and life. Perhaps this will give you some consolation: http://terrarosso.com/Poem-If%20you%20knew.htm I wish you a lot of good and caring friends and the guidance of The Light to help you through these difficult times.
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Well done , I like this one.
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anya this is anya this was an amazing poem!!!! wow
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im sorry about what happened to him. he must have been really special to you. its gonna b ok mom. remember i know how it feels.
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I hope that when I leave this earthly plane that someone will have the nerve to spek as well of me keep doing well
love the rev papa
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Mom you wanted my honest opinion on this one and here it is: I love it. As i always do on your writes. There you go. I hope that max is resting in peace. Did you say that he was related to you? That must be really hard. I've lost a lot of family members so I know what you are going through. Let me know if you need me
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Oh Anya. I'm so sorry. I hope things get better for you. Your emotion showed strongly in this poem. I hope Max is resting in peace. I really do. And I hope very much that you feeel better. Great detal and description. You are a very talented writer. Great flow and emotion!!!! It showed very well. I felt your pain.
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So beautiful...
This is really really cool. I like it. =']
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THis was a very sweet and loving poem. THanks for shareing
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this brought a tear to my eye great write x
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about time anya, this just proves that your reluctance to post is unfounded, so now you have no excuse , start writing and posting anya and well done
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