Before she sleeps
her daddy reads her a story and tucks her in
But what daddy doesn't know is she stays awake all night
while him and mommy fight
she hears the cussing
and the crash of bodies and objects being thrown
She doesn't like the fighting.
She cries every night while bombs are dropped
on a marriage and a family.
Later into her teen years, she couldn't take it anymore.
Cutting,
drinking,
sneaking out.
Anything to get away from them.
One night it all went too far,
intoxicated, she snuck out and was in a car accident.
Her parents were called to the scene where,
she was pronounced dead ten minutes later.
The tragedy brought them closer but they always wondered how much she heard.
Author notes
I'm sorry it is longer than twenty lines but its near impossible to express myself poetically in twenty lines
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Intruiging.
This was a diving narrative poem. It was very intruiging and yet soul shattering because it tore into walls of my own that I had thought to be invincible. Brava! Thanks so much for writing. -
Tragic and probably a story repeated all too often
A nice story narrative type poem. Well done
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Wow the meaning of this poem jus smacks u in the face, i enjoyed reading it, good job, and keep up the good work.
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Like romeo and juliet. It took their childrens deaths to stop the feud between their families.
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Very good job. A sad story with a bittersweet ending. Showing that sometimes it takes a tragedy to straighten us up. A story true for many I am sure.
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a very heart-wrenching piece. it pulled at my heartstrings, esp the ending.
a good take on the prompt; i had thought "before she sleeps" would be more of a mystical, dark prompt.
good job
about the length, a few lines over the limit's fine.
i agree that it's hard to poetically express yourself, because i naturally write long poems too.
but it's not that difficult to clip the poem here and there.
if you did it here, the poem would've been straight to the point and the emotions would be sharper and the story, more heartbreaking.
thanks for this write
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