Shaded by your breath
we kiss under a whisper
as tranquility haunts
our hearts pattern.
Dry like a winter rain,
we dance in the embrace
of our memories as souls shared,
only to become undone by
words carelessly cast.
Author notes
If you see him, say hi.
by Wawi Navarroza
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt... by ariazephyrzoe.
1000 points, ended November 21, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh my, what to say, what to say.... You only have two poems listed on the site but I am most certain there is so much that remains unsaid here.
All I can say at the moment is Bravo on such a superb bit of writing and the words are just right, like a perfect jigsaw puzzle of love and what can go wrong with it.
I like it, I like it so!
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Awesome
And so careless they can be, but we learn as we do.
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Simple Depth!
So little words with so much depth! This is a very pretty piece. Umm, Leonura, I think you're talent is showing!!
I feel like typically poets and artists are much more emotional and put so much more thought into things than the everyday person. That's why they're so much fun to read because every moment and every detail is described with so much feeling. Excellent Work!~Missy~
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beautiful
The shortest write in the contest yet it speaks volumes...
I totally agree with all the comments below...
and yes...sigh... a realtionship's wrecked because of the words inevitably uttered, like from the start, it has never been right...like veneer, shaded...lost to their feelings only to know, eventually it will disappear, only for that moment.
Thank you for sharing your talent. I love it
Anna Lee
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'I want to go in, but think
I shouldn't, that I might break one
of the instruments; I am an uncouth
barbarian from another century.'
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wow, tis a shame how something so perfect can be dissolved by words spewed
impulsive non-passionate slips of the tongue, that cut to the heart of the moment and leave scars.~~Great write.~~~Artis
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Beautiful imagery
well written but such a sad turn at the end....
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Wow, so rich lol and good luck in the contest.
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thoughtful take on the prompt . . good luck in the contest !!
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very pretty
love the last two lines
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Amazing take on the picture! Beautiful. Very sweet and soft and it had such a lovely flow to it. Great imagery and thank you for sharing this! Well done. Good luck to you in the contest love
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Very nicely written. This gently reveals a troubled moment. I enjoyed this piece. Geo
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Short and bitter sweet but memory dulls the pain in time. lovely write.
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Softly written C
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Short, but very sweet.
All the best hun.
mj.
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ooohhh, nicely done, i really like this, good luck and take care, Stephanie ♥
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