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The long wait--

When sun is hot
and body sweats profusely
and mind desires to have
cool and calm atmosphere by night.

From the cloudless sky
the star studded moon
starts smiling at me
cordially

My Soul celebrates
the fructified ,long wait

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30-40 words of Brilliance #28

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  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    November 6, 2008
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    A lovley take on the prompt here. Nice background too, made me smile. Best to you in the contest