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with my lips.....

I saw your smile fall from your lips
I caught you before you reached the ground
I saw your smile fall from your lips
and in my arms I carried you down.
You are my love I'll not let you fall
and in my heart I hold you
I saw your smile fall from your lips
and with my lips I caught you.


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  • Darkness-My Home
    November 5, 2008
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    Really sweet.


  • Pianokidd
    November 4, 2008
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    Very nice...

    I saw your smile fall from your lips
    and in my arms I carried you down

  • a n e s t h e s ia
    November 4, 2008
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    (agreed).


  • DemonicChanel420
    November 4, 2008

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    This is very beautiful.
    I love the repetition, & the wording.
    The flow and rhyme is also very good.
    I love it! It is a wonderful piece.


  • spirit rising
    November 4, 2008
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    i think this is a lovely peice, the last two lines are my favorite. well done


  • Dragonbabyx3
    November 4, 2008

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    This is beautiful, the flow was perfect, it was easy to read, and I could imagine this wonderfully. Great work!

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