When every boulder threatened us
I was not in the rush
For I knew I'm the only one
That sticks and stones can't crush
While weakness was a part of those
Who fell beneath the weight
I stood my ground inside the storm
Of fury and of hate
Amazed that I'm still holding on
To all the things I need
I am in control of this
'til grip begins to bleed
Author notes
Prompt: Dominance/Stength
A contest entry
- Picture/word Prompt by Leonura.
1020 points, ended November 11, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank you very much for your entry.
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sticks and stones, I like this poem,
though I'd advise that you wrote... "I know" rather than "I knew" in the third line!
However, despite my pinickityness (which probably isn't a word...) it's a good poem and will probably beat mine!
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I couldn't change the knew to know, as this poem is past tense. I do agree, though, that 'knew' sounds a bit dodgey in that sentence. Peff it.
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damn. I love this and the line made a very VERY effective ending. What I do want to see, even with this, are longer writes. More emotion. More More More.
And not just because I like em.
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Well, I did go to the beach early this morning and wrote a poem that's a little longer =]
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Excellent write, good take on the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
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