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" His Shadow's Footsteps "

I encountered this ravishing girl faltering weak and weary
On this benighted hallway, under this midnight dreary
I could not contemplate why, but she was uttering, mumbling
On this deserted hallway, under this pale full moon.

By the distance I was, watching her clinging the walls while she was faltering
While I was heeding there was some rapping, on the surface some tapping
Some bird this was, I calmly perceived, some bird it must be, I thought
Crawling louder rapping, tapping, as each candle's ember begin dying

Hailing in darkness, only speckled light reflects by her dazzling silken dress
Tapping, rapping echoes strikes in me this fantastic terror, in shock, in horror
A bolt of hesitation, a spark of glacial cold rushing up and down my spine
A maniacal seduction, an arousing dreading fear, fright, that has driven me

A dead end, but unrealized she appears to be, undaunted she carries on faltering
A slow tapping, rapping, Near I am, figuring her uttering; "His shadow's footsteps"
Tapping, rapping halted, "HALTED?" All unconceivable horrors thrusted in my heart
"His shadow's footsteps?" quivering I ask myself, as I glance at her lost eyes' direction

"Oh dear lord!" I cried
"I'm?",.. "I'm",.. "I'm!".....

Author notes

both the line and the pic i guess credit 'fear of the dark' by flyingman @ flickr
..theirs some meaning, some symbol in all of this i hope you get it, i hope you liked and enjoyed this, but most of all i hope you felt the write

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  • Beauty Of Silence
    November 16, 2008

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    puff! (and you're gone)

    okay, ignore that part. this piece was OMGOSH!!! freaky. but it was very well penned, and yes, i felt the write. that explains why i'm shivering right now. your expressions here stood out and the words you used made a differece. amazing write. and i know you'll go far, both in this contest and in life.

    PUFF! (and i'm gone)


  • Walk-Free
    November 4, 2008

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    ooh, i loved this.

    very eerie, intriguing and certainly imaginative.

    i must commend on your excellent use of imagery.

    you brought out the element of fear very strongly.

    one thing which can be improved here is the lengthy stanzas.

    i understand this is like a short story, but clipping the stanzas would make the poem more intense throughout.

    thanks for this awesome write! i enjoyed reading this