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Meanwhile.

 

 

 

Silvery ripples of light careen off my body

almost blinding me

 

“Um, thaat’ll be $4.50 for the quad shot cinnamon latte sir,” 

the young woman says, with a pierced tongue lisp.

 

I really need to start getting more sleep, I remember

thinking to myself

 

as I shuffle out the door into a fine, ice crystal mist

and stop, I am mesmerized by street lamps

turned into shafts of light

 

as if something was prompting me

to watch the winter skies…

 

“biometric life-support systems disengaging,

starting sequential countdown,

stellar navigation will switch to manual at pilots command...” 

 

Damn, it happened again

my coffee’s cold, and I'm late for work.

 

 

 

 

 

 

     

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“Sometimes, the veil between fantasy and reality is quite thin.”


MJ Donnelly-

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  • Progandother
    July 25

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    ...mmm...yummy...

    ...before I go off in a crazy tangent can I just say your background is surprisingly mesmerising...simple, subtle, and in this drunkern haze I can stare into it for hours...

    It's very difficult usually to fuse to different positions of existence but you sir seem to do it incredibly well. Thanks to the background of course I'm thinking of the shift between someone in some hazy space like dream while at the same time attempting to purchase and consume a coffee...and they've yet to succeed at it...

    ...the contrast of cold day metaphors with a specialist lexis of machinery is also incredibly refreshing...

    ...very well done and good luck in the contest...

    Oliver


  • alexandrathegreat
    November 5, 2008

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    lol this was funny and intriguing at the same time. You are right sometimes I find myself thinking about fantastical things when performing innate activities. Thank you so much for entering friend.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    Quite some imagination you have there

    Love this! Takes us inside your mind just a little!


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      November 5, 2008
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      Uh huh, come in, make yourself at home, and don't mind the Cheshire cats, they’re friendly enough but perhaps they talk too much. Just to let you know though, if they offer you a toke on their gold hookah, just smile and accept, but don’t inhale, it’s wicked stuff!


  • moon2u
    November 4, 2008
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    Photobucket


  • moon2u
    November 4, 2008

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    he he
    especially for a writer with a vivid imagination
    another winner methinks!
    good luck
    moon2u

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