Frozen, my life in suspended animation,
feel like an apparition of who I am;
unable to feel, create, live, debate,
going through the paces, getting nowhere
All that once seemed possible,
now eerily out of reach;
I only contemplate my inadequacy,
in comparison to the greats
Longing to grow but my limbs can no longer stretch,
want to know the extent of my inabilities, no,
I can’t bear to go there…;
It’s to painful, I’ll just try to sleep and forget
Can’t seem to find joy in any pursuit,
none of my former pastimes is fulfilling;
want something new in my life,
nothing outside of me is affecting my inner being, the clock has stopped!
Words: K.Botka
11/4/08
Author notes
I think I'm too 
to have attempted this. This is very prosaic & not what I intended, but my fingers kept moving with my mind. I've another version of this that's double the size! I totally forgot this was only supposed to be 16 lines. Well, it's 16 exactly. I cut the poem in half. 
Now I can go to sleep and 
. Not really. I'm too tired to cry. I'll just go to sleep. I hope! 
A contest entry
- Prompt contest... 16 entries; 16 lines or less by Grey Mouser.
700 points, ended November 19, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How'm I doin'?
Comments
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Some find themselves in a situation that holds them in static positions. Aching to explore, yet unable to take the first step. Well written and thanks for entering into the contest.
Be well and be blessed,
Mouser -
good luck in the contest !!
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this is a deep introspection full of despair and so much talent and balance in how you wrote it. they say when somebody loses something they get something too like if you lose hearing you can see better or something else gets enhanced, you gotta concentrate on the enhancing parts i think.
All that once seemed possible,
now eerily out of reach;
that's how im gonna feel if i dont nail my SATs
Can’t seem to find joy in any pursuit,
none of my former pastimes is fulfilling;
ive felt like that too i even use to cut when i felt like that
very gripping and feeling write
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Kathleen
Oh so moving! beautiful! I so feel this way and can relate more than you know! i want to do so many things in my life but fear has me trapped, i get the oportunity, then shrink back and retreat!! oh woe!
Kathleen your work is beautiful!! bravo!!
Blessings
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