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trapped

dirt piles under
my neglected nails, tired
of peeling away
the Lead from these hard shackles,
ringing and clanging like gongs

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  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    November 22, 2008
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    Very short...

    Maybe a little hard to understand...

    I hope you managed to free yourself...


  • dustytiger
    November 4, 2008

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    i actually feel ike i'm trapped, with so few words you really captured a feeling, great work, best of luck in the contest