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It has been some time,
Since I've graced your lines
with words of love and whispered screams...
and
It been some time,
since i've had the rhyme
to produce my life through a poetic means...


It has been some time,
Far too long,
since my pen has penned that magical ink
and It aches my soul
to recognize that it's been this way because of too much drink

...because..... of too much drink

It's because of me
it has been so  long
since I was able to dance my aching hands

It is because of me
it has been so long
Since I've been able to breathe in my poetric lungs...

My god, how good it feels to breathe
And how good it is to see you

I have missed you sorely
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  • just mercedes gold member
    February 3, 2009

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    I like this, I recognise the feeling of welcoming poetry as a friend who allows you to dance and sing. Also the recognition that sometimes you, yourself, erect barriers against yourself. Nice to meet you, my Lady.


  • MenthrinKuth
    November 22, 2008

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    It's rather cute. Although skipping back and forth between rhyme and not is somewhat confusing to the brain. Not bad though. n.n -hugs, and kiss to the cheek- It's been a while, Lady Anna.


    • Lady Patricia
      November 25, 2008
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      Yes, i see how you mean...

      It has simply been too long since I've been able to really... write something.

      Missus,
      thank you for your reply on my writing.
      i do hope we get to speak soon.

      I have a new phone number, Im not sure if you have it.
      If you do not please be sure to let me know.

      *sneaks a kiss to your cheek before returning into the mists of a horrible New York Feeling reality*