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Article: Austin Chain Murders by VSutton, reporter

Upon the page a hundred words displayed
the beating and hanging of another man
In the center of town the murders replayed
and the women would watch if they can

Pages have been repeated for several days
every piece containing something broader
Then in the mind the horrid image lays
and sleeping at night becomes even harder

As each article is being released for all to see
evidence is revealed as the murderer runs free.

Author notes

Articles in PassionsPromise News

Murders have been following a obvious pattern. Monday night 10 p.m Joshua Noneya 35 years old, caucasion male,was walking home from work when he was pulled into the shadows of a nearby park in Austin where he was beaten and hung from one of the 30 year old trees. Tuesday night, Jonathon Moore 33, hispanic male, driving home from a concert, stopping in Austin to repair a flat, witnesses saw a black Sedan with 3 caucasion males offering to assist. Family and friends last seen Moore at approximately 10:15 p.m. Body was found hanging in the park....Wednesday night the officers reinacted what they feel to be the scene performed by the murder(ers).

If you have any information, please contact VSutton at the PassionsPromise News. There is a reward upon the arrest and conviction of these said bandits.

They are innocent until DNA proves them guilty.

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  • The Fun House silver member
    November 22, 2008

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    Oh, very creative and I think you've put your prompt to great use on this piece. It flows well, has just enough info to let the mind roam and I truly enjoyed it.

  • Judith Chandler
    November 11, 2008

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    This makes my shiver and I believe it is quite realistic. It's a dramatic story and I like the form as well.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 6, 2008
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    A complete change for you but deftly done and nicely worked. The notes are larger than the poem.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    November 3, 2008

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    Very interesting and creative work here!
    I love the thought that you put into this.
    It seemed very real at first! Wonderful work
    and keep it up my friend. All the best to
    you in this contest!





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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 3, 2008

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    i think this was a real thing there then i saw the comments, wow, you did a great job on this, keep ti flowing and good luck in the contest


  • The Drifter
    November 3, 2008

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    Seems authintic--like reading it right out of s neespaper.
    Yhis vould be your calling,
    an investigative reporter.

  • GoneToo
    November 3, 2008

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    Interesting one here. A lot different than your usual but I still really liked it. All in all I'd say this deserves a trophy. rhyming is fabulous like always!


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