Light cutting through my mind
Like shards of glass pressing in
I wish for another place and time
I need more air to breathe
They say I just need to grieve
Time is slow, mind is jumbled
I can't move on terror sets in
My life is crashing I feel myself crumble
I need to fight
But I'm not sure how to make it through the night
I see the pain inside
like far away in the distance
but where I am now feels like I've died
I have a blade I'll use my treasured friend
I have to feel i have to live I have to put this to an end
I need help I need a cure
you said meds would help
But which you wasnt sure
I trusted you and now look I quit the meds you see
and Im a much happier me
Author notes
4. http://media.photobucket.com/image/dark/kyttiam/terjohana.gif?o=180
A contest entry
- Take Me to the Dark Side by Paloszoo.
700 points, ended November 13, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
Comments
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Stark, emotional writing, with a gratifying ending. A good write.
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thank you so much...!
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Your description In this write Is raw and emotional
I hope you are doin good now
Two thumbs up
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Wow
Oh yes depression is so hard and you discribed this very well. Great for the contest for it is the Darker Side of any persons: being if they have experienced it like this. Your ryhme, rythem and flow with great imagery of these types of emotions and feeling are great.. You ended it on a happy not. Best wishes in the contest.
Wishing You Many Blessings
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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Great take on the prompt! Nicely done. Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you share your work here. Good luck!
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Wow, some excellent emotions here, I love the happier ending you gave it. An awesome write, good luck hunni
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I am glad that you are finding some happiness in your life I hope things keep getting better for you thanks for sharing take care
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I am glad you were able to get your life back together and kick the meds. Congratulations. I am proud of it.
Mike
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