Oh Lord, if I could have one dream come true,
I'd take last night's and even with its trials
For for that passion - Oh! What I would do...
In waking hours I flounder in denial...
So many inhibitions, so much fear,
And no one who comes close to slaking me...
But I will raise my head and hold the tear
In longing for what dreams may let me see;
My love. Sweet love, I only hope that you
Aren't just a phantom spawned by loneliness
To merely help me cope and pull me through.
I pray you're real - a man in like distress
Who dreams of me the same and we will we meet
Someday beyond the night, the dreams, the sheet.
Author notes
Frodofan
A contest entry
- Farewell to Fall Invitational by Kikai Ni.
800 points, ended December 10, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - English Sonnets Please (romantic) by poets whisper.
900 points, ended November 28, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Absolutely stunning writing. It had such a wonderful flow and just drew me in.. Great job.
Good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
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The best part was that, although you were dismal, you were not desperate, because "a phantom spawned of loneliness to merely help [you] cope" was not enough. A flowing poem, a light dance of a poem, for sure, but very substantial. You never fail to amaze.
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great poem. awesome flow nd everything.
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wonderfully done...questioned whether love is just a phantom, or a dream...I like the complexity of this sonnet. Good luck in the contest
(typo---> lonliness)
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Thank you and thanks for pointing out the typo.
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Outstanding
Sonnets really should be about love they are perfect for this theme. This poem achieves so much. I liked how you developed your argument and the last couplet was brilliant. Thank you for posting.
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A superb sonnet! There are so very few even capable of penning such a verse here. You have translated hopes and dreams into words, which is what one is supposed to do as a poet. Most powerful. Excellent!
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Lovely work miss! The meter is nice the diction eloquent, the tone touching, compelling. May God and the saints bless and keep you!
, Dannie
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