for once in this sad life
i wasn't afraid
i just did it
when that voice came from the other end i knew
i knew there was something
i wasnt looking for him
he found me
then stole my heart
sewing it back together
with his easy smile
and flowing words
he just understood
for once someone understood
the world could go to hell
in the handbasket i wove
if only i could stay with him
if only we could be together
i would give this life
the one finally found
the one never before liked
if it meant he would survive
always there
never forgotton
his heart lives on im my chest
as mine does in his
stopping
everytime he smiles
everytime he talks
everytime he looks at me
what did i ever do
to deserve him?
i have always caused the pain you see in others
so how do i deserve someone so grand
someone so perfect
his easy smile
his flowing words
certaintly i don't deserve this
but i will one day make up for the lives i have ruined
the pain i have caused
if it meant we could be together
together forever
Author notes
.....eh its okay..
A contest entry
- Share what someone means to you. by Nicada.
550 points, ended November 8, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Put Him On A Golden Pedestal by Frodofan.
525 points, ended November 17, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
thoughts???
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Thanks for entering.
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i think you should break this up more into stanza's perhaps? might be more reader friendly i should think. let me know what you reckon. i liked it nontheless, the content was excellent.
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okay...i broke it up..im not very good at making stanzas {which is why i usually dont} so let me know if this is any better..thanks
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This is sweet, and it is amazing what love can do to heal a person and lift them up when they are down. Great job on this poem, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty
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I think this sounds like a rant of repentence. I think you did well on this, and I rnjoyed this quite alot. Best of luck in your contest.
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