Don't make me a promise,
when I know you just don't care,
don't tell me you will,
when I know you won't be there,
you let me in so you could shut me out,
i'm dying of fright and reeking of doubt,
don't forget to remember me,
and don't forget,
when you were blind, I could still see.
Knock. Knock.
Were on two differents sides of the door,
I can't take trying to love you anymore,
were not the same,
this isn't right,
I don't wanna be shut out,
can't be left alone,
my little house, isn't much of a home,
broken windows,
echoing tin roof,
drowning out my silence,
and you living with a snow white fence,
framing the essence of your love,
skirting the red shutters and big blue door,
I won't do it,
I can't take being shut out anymore.
Knock. Knock.
Enter at your own risk,
stare straight down at my razor kissed wrists,
crimson blades crying out on my floor,
you'll be the death of me, if I have to take one more,
one more lie coming from your lips,
or having to taste the deception in your kiss,
the lasthouse in the back of the alley,
screams drowned out by the drunken rantings of dear aunt Sally,
trying to escape through the bolted steel doors,
i'm too gone, already dead,
you can't shut me out anymore.
....Knock...Knock......
A contest entry
- close every door to me.[picture prompt] by redhanded.
725 points, ended November 10, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hmm? What hmmm??
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AMAZING
this was so amazing oh my god you have no clue, oh by the was savi, never forget that I love you!
<3AlWaYs
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Thanks so much Grady....Love ya too.
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wow. this is one of best writes i've ever read. i really like how it was written and the word use and just everything about it. its fantastic. amazing. def. worthy of a trophy! good luck in the contest. <3
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Thanks so much hun!!! That really means a lot!!!
Once again thanks!
<3
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You're welcome. =)
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wow. I love piece....it is fantastic. I love the word usage and the vocabulary as well as the images placed in my mind. It is a very intense piece....and I am very glad you took time to enter this contest. thank you for your entry. and best of luck to you in the future and with your writing
andi
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Thanks so much!!
It was a new poem I wrote especially for this contest. Im so glad you like it!!
Love Always,
Savi
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wonderful...for who
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A few people collectively.
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Hm... It does have meaning. I guess everyone feels like this sometimes. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks Ty Ty
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