Oh gentle touch upon my naked hand
Divine proof that alone I never stand
Brisk winds cutting me deeply to the bone
Your warm, gentle embrace to me be known.
For even when I’m overwhelmed and lost
Love comes not at a particular cost
All you ask that I remember your Grace
Honor and worship you in any place.
Though I oft forget and stray from your side
You welcome me back with arms open wide
Your omnipotent guidance brings forth light
Resign my heart and soul to be all right.
Oh God, my Father, you make me humble
Walking your path so that I won’t stumble
Author notes
P A L O S Z O O
21)"God is so in-your-face!"(Bart Simpson)
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A contest entry
- Friends old and new by melphleg.
700 points, ended November 20, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - all the prewrites you want (theres a catch) by serenity silvermoon.
400 points, ended January 7, 299 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 31 Quote Promts to Choose From - Please Make Yourself Heard by Shantti.
1100 points, ended January 20, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Word Up by 2lullabyhaven.
625 points, ended May 22, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hey, this poem gave me a lot of comfort. I was brought up in the church and believed in god, but as soon as i realised that i was being sexually abused at home, i blamed god and have never been able to connect with him again. I do believe in angels though, they keep me strong. A very moving piece and picture, thank you xxx
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wao love, great words, fab write, thank you, and good luck
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Oh God, my Father, you make me humble
Walking your path so that I won’t stumble - hmm... very beautiful statement of faith...!
thanks for the entry,
love,
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A very beautiful poem revealing the love and hope we always have in God. Wonderful flow and perfect rhyme scheme. I love the tone of the piece, it instills a wonderful sense of peace and hope. Every line encompasses the love we have in God, always and forever. Thank you so much for this wonderful entry, it definitely brought a smile to my face. Besf of luck in the contest.
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This is beautiful. Very well written and with great emotion. Thank you so much for entering.
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Thanks for this gentle reminder of His grace.
WONDERFUL!!!!!!!!!!!
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wow this was
just amazing. Made
the water works harder
this time. I'm crying harder
now.
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wow...that was impressive. the rhythm is perfect..the timing..the word choice...everything was tuned down to perfection..nicely written
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Yes, this is His love in action, holding our hand, etc...thank you for your entry
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very beautiful
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I am a pagan, but I think sprirtualty in general makes wonderful poetry. You really did amazing
The Positives:
I loved what you did with this it had great imagery and emotion
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
Though I oft forget and stray from your side
You welcome me back with arms open wide
Your omnipotent guidance brings forth light
Resign my heart and soul to be all right.
you really did amazing
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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very nicely
written poem. However, I specifically asked for a prayer for the world... not a personal prayer. Thanks for sharing this with us... very emotional very spirtual prayer. And thanks for entering ths into my contest. I also love the picture I have seen it before. -
i liked this poem. thanks for your entry.
although i find it hard to judge becuase of what i believe.
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Thank you for your entry to cheer up Zannah,
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this is good it really reached out to me p.p
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congratulations on the gold
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great choice of words and nice imagery, even though i dont believe even i saw the undeniable appeal in this poem, i will take another look before im done
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You've created a beutiful poem here, which I believe captures the beauty of God well.
I like the prompt you chose.
Thank you for your entry.
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nice prayer.
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The rhyme in this was really good, it never sounded forced at all. I thought sometimes it flowed better than others but overall its pretty good. Thanks for sharing!
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this is so full oh hope and love, it truely is beautiful. thank you so much for enteirng my contest and best of luck!
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This is a very beautiful uplifting poem. It was very emotional, but at the same time it kind of felt a little disconnected. That's the only thing I didn't like. Beautiful and word choice. Good luck.
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Beautiful words for a beautiful melody!
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beautiful~
This is a beautiful sonnet..
Bob is a special man alright...and friend...
I have known him a long time...there is nothing he wouldn't do for you if you asked...he would give you his shirt off his back I do believe...
Congrats on the Bronze Trophy as well
I won Honorable Mention so we both won
Hope you come give mine a read as well
Hugs
Susan~~~
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this is a fantastic piece, truly inspirational in it's beauty, you certainly have captured something worth living for in this, best of luck in the contest
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I love this! It is a beautiful sonnet. It is very encouraging to read. It contains some beautiful truth that we all need.
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good job this was well written I really liked it thank you for taking time to enter and good luck
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Amen
Such truth in this piece and I so love it you have penned this with such feeling my dear
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Beautifully penned with flawless rhyme. You have only enhanced the inspiration of the the picture. Fantastic piece. I truly loved it. ~mandie~
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this poem is beautifully written and the rhyme scheme has a flawless flow. thank you for entering my contest. best of luck!
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A sonnet that could be like a hymn the way you have written it K...The picture enhances your inspirational words of love from our master.. His embrace is so reassuring to us all, and for the one for whom you write it for....Another masterpiece in your collection!
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As long as you have faith, you have no true fear.
For if you know that you are being guided, you are gifted
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nicely written..good luck in the contest
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This is really a beautiful sonnet and what a fantastic statement of faith. Standing ovations!
Love,
Amera♥
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Beautiful!!!!! Your words covey such depth of love.
Exquistely expressed and in such flowing style. It made me think of my favourite bit in the bible; 'Greater love hath no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends.'
The Lord surely did just that. Beautiful.
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WOW. This one here deserves a GOLD! I loved this, its so beautiful and touching..excellento with a cherry on top! =)
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Just Beautiful
Wow the beauty of the humble tribute to our Heavenly Father is just stunning in this most perfect poem. The ryhme, rythem and flow with just beautiful emotions and imagery makes this just a winner standing alone in and of itself. God the Father when we are surrendered keeps us humble for sure to him and then this does keep us from stumbling as you basically stated in this beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing your love for the Lord with me as well as your beautiful talent to write poetry.
Wishing You Many Blessings
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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Thank you for this poem, I enjoyed the thoughts behind it. Thank you for the entry into my contest
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Wow this is absolutely wonderful. I can't say enough about the picture. It has got to be a favorite of mine! Lovely. Wonderful. I don't have the words to express what I think of this picture. And your poem adds so much to that picture. A great combination you have going here. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Embraced
Your words here definately have me feel your heart...like a heart like David and a given hope of grace and mercy...the picture sums it up and it is so beautiful
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this is beautiful, sis!! and, I love this picture. good luck in contest and I do hope things will be OK for your dear mom
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