silence echoes
beneath the croak
of a frog
where the wind
blows dark
at a distant dog
and midnight cradles
loneliness, as moments hide
within memories
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A very serene and at the same time vivid poem. Lovely descriptions and style.
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Wow...I guess you just have this big bag where you just pick out some words and...voilá...
Loved it,
XXJeannette
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Thanks Jeanette
Iasked myself what am I experiencing and this is the outcome. Thanks for reading and commenting. Frans
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FINALLY. This is perfect. Absolutely perfect.
I really like how the silence is "beneath" the echo of the croak. Such a great stanza.
Really, all of this is just... wow.
Nice work.
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I am glag you enjoyed this one. Thanks for leaving a comment. Frans
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Bookmarked :].
Hah, no problem. Nice work.
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Beautiful work!
So vivid and precise recreating memories ... You have such a flair to write your exact feelings!
Some suggestions:
silence echoes
the croak of a frog
where a distant dog
barks
at the howling wind
and midnight cradles
loneliness, as moments hide
within memories
As I say, see it as a suggested version.
Your poetry is RICH and meaningful. What a gift you have.
Love
Myra
Ps. Good luck with your assessment!
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Myra,
thanks for the suggestions - I always value these. Frans
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You have aptly described the moment of truth when the industrial world is silenced and we are left alone to ponder. Well written. Peace, Liz
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Thanks Liz
With all you have to do, and still find the time to stop over to read and comment - I appreciate this. Frans
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Lovely Words
My friend, You always pen such beatiful and eloquent poetry. Always a pleasure to read when I drop by your page. Such few simple words that have deep thoughtful meaning! An excellent write.
You take care. Hugs and Smile to you and blessings to your friends and loved ones.
Peace and Grace,
Sandy
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Thanks Sandy
I have just ended my second day of assessing my students, and it is nice to read your comments. I enjoyed the write, taking from nature as it passed by. Frans
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Magnificent poetry. The impact makes me stand in awe. It is amazing at times what a few lines of well chosen words can do to our mind. It makes me wonder what beautiful things we could have done with it. The metaphors are stunning.
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Thank you for the comments. It is wonderful to read your message. Frans
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Love the images, Many times I go out on my deck to hear such a sound as I think...blessings
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