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Cerebral Creations


thought

turned to idea

in simple brilliance

 

courage crept

as inspiration intruded

 

fear was ushered outside

when confidence cornered him

 

and faith

arose,

began to flower

 

so momentum steamrolled

caught in future's embrace

 

until success

shadowed belief

 

and satisfaction

eased herself

 

into the rewards

of effort...

 

 

 

 

 

 

A contest entry

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  • LadyUnique silver member
    November 5, 2008

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    i could almost see positive pushing negative out the door
    this is smooth. not a word wasted and not one word too many. clever too i enjoyed this

  • TannyB
    November 5, 2008
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    I enjoyed the expressions of emotion- the move form fear to faith-the move to trust


  • Cannonsfire
    November 5, 2008

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    I really enjoyed this piece, it's strong yet it has the softest voice towards the end. Well done C


  • just mercedes gold member
    November 4, 2008

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    I really enjoyed this poem. The formatting, once I'd first read it, made me think of a block of chocolate divided into squares. Each stanza needs to be enjoyed on its own before going on to the next. The personifications were well done. I had a problem with "success shadowed belief" until I wondered if belief is no longer needed by success. Hmmmm.


  • Debbie Hansman
    November 4, 2008

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    Each line in this seems to stand on its own...just the way it flows.

    Nicely done!

    Thank you for entering & Good luck!

    debbie

  • michaeline
    November 4, 2008

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    I think you did a good job on this poem.Theflow was nice and the layout with this backround went well.I can tell that you put alot of thought into tis piece.You were complex in what you were saying but it was still not to hard to follow.I do like your choice of the title.Good luck in the contest.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    November 4, 2008

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    Superb

    Ah, 'tis a very fine write, indeed. You express your thoughts quite clearly. Thanks for sharing this one with us.

  • Reyn Ithernus
    November 4, 2008

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    Awesome. I think the personification of the concepts could've been expanded a bit, but the idea itself is really, really cool and the execution is solid. Well done.


  • Leonura
    November 3, 2008
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    Such words from a poet who truly is full of beautiful talent..

  • xJustifiablyMex
    November 3, 2008

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    Beautiful...simply beautiful!


    Nijole

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