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As we sit on the love swing.

As we sit on the love swing

Just the two of us sitting on our love swing,
The dark clouds hanging over us,
We sit and talk and share our inner most thoughts,
Hand in hand we are…
Time just passing us… hour by hour,
My heart aching incase you leave me,
Think of all the good times we have had,
Not the silly little petty ones,
Teenage love is truly amazing,
Our love is strong,
Our hearts beating as one,
Swinging on our love swing,
We both feel we want to sing,
Just the two of us,
Here together without any fuss,
Time to talk and tell each other how we truly feel,
Without anyone trying to interfere,
A very precious time,
One without any crime,
So I ask you to please tell me,
That you will stay with me,
And not think about walking the other way,
From this minute on… we begin,
To live our lives with love,
Not afraid to express ourselves to each other,
And not in way causing a bother.

Namaste Selfexpressive aka Karen.

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Option 4 = Love Swing

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  • Evemauy gold member
    November 29, 2008
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    Nice poem.

    I would maybe change the words to full sentences. And add more metaphors.

  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    November 3, 2008
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    Hey OK so you have to write a poem on Option 4 - Love Swing.. Do a good job.. Best Wishes