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November ravishes a land
Once kissed by summers gentle hand
Verdant gowns lay tossed and torn
Eroded, that which once was worn
Mackerel skies pertain to rain
Battered .bruised, reduced to pain
Earth surrenders to the season
Resistance has no rhyme or reason
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Author notes
November (acrostic) for contest by Barbara
In a list
A contest entry
- November Acrostics Contest by Barbara.
550 points, ended November 15, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Awesome! Normally I don't like acrostics very much, but I think you may be changing my mind about them!
I love how though the poem spells out "November", that isn't the title, and it rhymes too, but it's not forced. What lovely word choice: "Verdant gowns lay tossed and torn " is my favorite line. So cool. Best of luck in the contest!
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i liked it. i dont know y because i have no idea what its about!!
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This is a wonderful characterization of the month of November, the imagery is as crisp as the morning air. Well Done!
Dennis
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'Once kissed by summers gentle hand.' I loved this line. And love the rhyming too
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Your write is so smooth and I barely tried to do my best and write it and make it rhyme. this is so easy on the mind, and flows so well. i liked the way your chose to write this, the title sums it all, It doesnt even look like and acrostic you know.. wonderfully, cleverly done.
thank you so much for reading and commenting mine, its an honour to be even read by you Legend!
Much love and respect,
Lencio
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clever and creative, i thought this would be about something else, but you did a great job on this, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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thank you Disturbed Prodigy guess the title did give the idea it may have been referring to something different As you can see it was merely the opening of line two
Thank you for taking time to read and comment
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Oh, I love it. What a great acrostic. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you jaded, so pleased that you thought this one worthy of such a nice comment Thank you
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oh, this is cute and clever. i love the use of mackerel, an unusual word to be sure.
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Thank you tribal
Mackerel, yes i guess it is a strange word to use in such a piece
A note on it
Mariners pay careful
heed to dramatic displays of the
cirrocumulus cloud, which they
referred to as a mackerel sky.
It can be a precursor of storms,
warning them to batten down
the hatches
it just seemed fitting as well as providing the M for the acrostic
Thank you for your comments
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Very very clever - packed with all things Novembery!
xxx Hilly
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Thank you Hilly for reading and commenting It is always pleasing to get another poets take on ones work
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Stunning Imagery
Hello Legend, You have penned a beautiful poem about one of my favorite months. It is a gray month but I anticipate the holidays and love all the hustle and bustle about to begin. Thank you for sharing. Excellent acrostic. Take care.
Sandy
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Thank you Sandy I too enjoy this time of year Though have to admit a little more sun on some days would be welcome
Thank you for your comments They are as always appreciated Thank you
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A fine example of how ...
an acrostic can still be a wonder-full rhyming poem that is filled with imagery! You have shared some choice expressions that were unusual and two of the lines that I really liked were:
"Verdant gowns lay tossed and torn
Eroded, that which once was worn"
I so appreciate poetry such as yours! j
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I almost feel as if you were looking out my window
at my woods when you wrote this one.
bravo
and good luck
moon2u
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Moon i was looking out of your window when i wrote this. Along with many other windows where the scenery shows the same face this time of year Thank you for your comments
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I like it. Its different Really Good Work
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Thank you Panic so pleased that you enjoyed this one
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Wonderful acrostic describing November perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you Scarlet for taking time to read and comment I appreciate it
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Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
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Thank you Striders Bar for taking time to read and comment much appreciated
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How beautifully the images of November come together in this acrostic poem! Gold! I'm listening to the rain in the trees and on the pavement outside my window as I read this, and it does feel as if the world is crying at the loss of soft summer. We are blessed that the foliage stays green here throughout winter, but the sky will be gray and weepy for months.
Flannel, hot chocolate, and warm hearths are very inviting, and stay the cold wet grip of winter.
~Karen
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Thank you Karen seems like we both have the same weather outside our windows Do you live next door? Fennel, hot chocolate, and a blazing fire in the grate sounds just right i'll be right over
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Aye, next door, right across the pond! You are welcome neighbor. :))
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Mackerel skies... interesting imagery there. I like it
Excellent rhyme with this acrostic and a very easy reading flow that makes it a pleasure to read. One little thing, though... The first rule listed was no pictures used with the poem.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Doh what a fool i am Image removed. A smack on the wrist is acceptable
Thank you so much for your comments
I promise to read, learn, and inwardly digest in future
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It's so lovely to read of a northern hemisphere November as the season brings on so many changes, all beautiful in their own way. Your acrostic is so descriptive and gentle, easy to read again and again. Von ~
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Thank you Von my friend on you i can depend to get a fine review Thank you so much
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What an amazing acrostic I so enjoyed reading. Such wonderful and vivid imagery throughout. Good luck in the contest I am sure you will do well. hugs Theresa
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Thank you tawk it is always a pleasure to have another poet comment on your work make the writing even more pleasurable Thank you
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I agree with the quote below, i too didnt realise it was an accrostic. That was amazing!
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Thank you onionducks I appreciate you stopping by to read and comment thank you
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Beautiful! Didn't even realize it was an acrostic - well done!
Wonderful images!
best wishes in your contest
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Thank you abloomer i guess not realizing it was anacrostic is a wonderful comment on its own Proving that the words captured the reader and not the form Thank you
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wonderful! What a pleasure to read! You did beautifully here and the rhyme was so smooth!
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Thank you federman for your coments it is always nice to know what another poet thinks of your work
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Beautiful piece. Captured the month well, and the rhyming and rhythm are great. Nice acrostic. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you topnotchsy for taking the time to read and comment i appreciate it
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A beautiful acrostic, perfectly worded and full of imagery.
Written with your usual imagery...perfect.
All the best in the contest...Sue
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dear Sue always suportive comments from your pen I thank you
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Yep
It is that time of year.
I liked the rhyme and the form.
Your meter flows well. More lyrical than counted.
I have not done an acrostic in some time.
Retirement is for the birds. Less and less time everyday.
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Thank you Jim retirement gives you the time to do what you thought you never had time to do when working Just goes to show what you have been putting off
Take care my friend
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very good. Nice one Wizard.
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Thank you Janice for taking time to read and comment
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Superb stuff, well worked acrostic in perfect meter, crisply rhymed. Bang on content too.
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Thank you Jeff it is a pleasure to receive your comments as ever
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Lovely Legend, You have captured the month very well my friend. Excellent...mal good luck....
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Thank you so much Mal for your always welcome comment
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Thank you so much Mal for your always welcome comment
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