So very slow on the uptake,
I wanna hit my life’s brakes.
Just step out of it, take in the breeze.
To step away from this disease.
The climb, so hard to take a breath.
Wanting to stop and take a rest.
But if I did, I’m sure I’d drop,
Fall asleep, a timeless nod.
Seems so hard to stop and smile.
I last did that back many a mile.
If I laughed, I’d carry on.
I’d love to laugh ‘til I’m undone.
Even a cry would help me so.
It might even help me grow.
The sun comes up and goes away.
No words left, nothing to say.
An uptake of another kind comes,
Time’s brakes stop my tiring run.
I’m lightning flashing through the breeze,
Flying away from the disease.
Climbing so easy, can’t catch my breath,
I’m moving up, finding my rest.
Loving the flight not fearing a drop.
My past falls asleep, eternal nod.
Seems so hard to stop my smile.
Seems I’m forgetting all my miles.
I start to laugh, it carries on.
Laughing and laughing, I’m redone.
Then comes a cry, freeing me so.
It seems I need to no longer grow.
I’m with the Lord, not going away.
His sight leaves me with nothing to say.
© 10-31-08
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magnificent
This is one beautiful piece.
I believe this talks about a journey,and not just any journey, but the journey of life and through life that everyone must take. A race up the mountain so well run that in the end the saviour's smile is well worth the effort it took to make that climb. when you're there, finally, you forget all the pain, the cuts the bruises that life gave you on that upward climb.
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very nice...
It sounds like you are describing a coming out experience. A situation where someone has excepted their calling and knows that it is the only thing sustaining them. Birth into rebirth, burden down into salvation, confusion into complete understanding that it isn't my battle to fight nor my victory to win, To God be the glory.. And when that battle is over when his victory is won then shall I see his face and dwell with him forever. Again very very nice poem.
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Nicely done
It's all about humility. Essentially you've let go and let Love. You've let go that heavy coat of pride in order to rise. Like the yeast thrice needed down you've begun to rise a hundred fold. Yes, what more can be said when you've experience the Reign of God, the exstacy of Love Is/God Is.
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It sound like you went through a great illness or life's trials and then death set you free into eternal life and love with our Lord. A wonderful and beautiful poem.
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Your talking of either rebirth or life ater death (His Promise) I enjoyed it very much. It was a wonderful read. Rose
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Could also be the Rapture.
Thanks!
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Wonderful
As always my brother, fluid and rich words chosen well and used to perfection. This is a lovely write one that i throughly enjoyed.
Great Job.
*Go with God*
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Valerie
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