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From nought,
like crystal flakes
of snow from frosty air
or UniVerse from vacant space,
the One Presence goes forth with tender Heart,
a gift from Self, given to Self...
a present not by rhyme
or reason bought...
from Nought
...
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Author notes
"In this profound poverty of being nothing,
every something is a present."
http://www.jeanniezandi.com/
Rictameter - 9 lines with syllable counts 2,4,6,8,10,8,6,4,2, with lines 1 and 9 being the same.
A contest entry
- Words Of Wisdom By Contemporary Spiritual Teachers : Jeannie Zandi by maa.
777 points, ended November 16, 2008, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Your poems pull at the sleeping soul to awaken... very uplifting, indeed.
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Thanks friend. My writing mostly reflects my own awakening and truly is an effort to raise a light that might help others to see their own.
Peace and blessings,
Rahad
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This is profoundly beautiful, visually as well as poetically. What an unusual form, I'd never heard of it. It brings forth all sorts of thought associations. I love the first and last lines I love the last three lines and the rhyme, effortless rhyme, of the last two spoken lines. The fact that you spell it "UniVerse" suggests to me God the poet. The Gift? To me the shape of the gift could be Saturn, a top ( how the Universe whirls!) , or a Christmas ornament. How fitting and how beautiful!!!!
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All is a gift of the Creator
"From Naught"
"The Unmoved Mover"--Aristotle
"the One Presence... with tender Heart"
"God is Love"--(St.) John
You may be the deepest thinker in AP. I am still trying to get my mind around this.
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excellent
This is a mystery revealed with beautiful imagery, "the One Presence goes forth with tender Heart", and though we recognize it, there is no "where" that it comes from. These are profound ideas, congratulations for silver.
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Thank you
From the No-thing, out of No-where comes the self expression of the Unnameable, the Unknowable, making known to Itself the infinite Awareness of Being. All we see, feel, understand is that gift of Self to Self, that One Word, "I (AM)", in its infinite possibilities....
Be ever blessed and bright,
Rahad
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a perfect way to respond to the prompt ...
I can really capture the mirrored essence of it in your creative verse ...
I love the way you are using the poetry-form of the rictameter in order to underline your message ... the letters seem to be springing from naught and returning to it ... the UniVerse has seduced me as well ... in very few well selected words, you are telling the story of creation ... the symbol of the crystal flake is very appropriate for the crystallization of matter from spirit ...
an elegantly wise poem of graceful truth ...
thank you so much,
maa
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Just a gratefully given gift, given from that gracious gift I AM, in return for the graceful gift You Are...
Rahad
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This is a beautiful insight full poem.
I know this is form poetry. I can't remember what kind. You might include the form name and syllable count in your AN's. (crystal needs to respelt and universe) The thought in this is profound and well written. I am very happy to have stopped here and seen this piece.
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Thanks, Dark Otter, for the comment, compliment and the editing. My spelling of UniVerse is intentional, signifying the One Word, the unified action of Consciousness or Awareness manifest as form. The other misspelling is just a resistance to using the spellchecker
I'm glad the message touched you. I've used the form before and forgot the name (not being much of a form writer). I just thought it fit the suggestion of going from nothing to something then back to nothing. I'll try to look up the form name (the syllable count is 2,4,6,8,10,8,6,4,2) and put it in my note.
Be ever blessed and bright,
Rahad
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lovely poem, an eye opener
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Thank you
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Where do those airy diamonds come from? It is all light, all a gift. Beautiful thoughts, and lovely expression. Best wishes!
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Thanks
Like Being form Non-being, like salt crystals from a super saturated solution, seeded by Awareness and Love.... from Nothing/Everything...
Rahad
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So beautifully worded, the play of the syllables, the rhymes that open and flower so lovingly, this is too a gift. What a lovely concept, of such a priceless thing that cannot be bought or sold, only given. Wondrous.
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Oh, it's Nothing.....
Thanks for the gracious gift of comment and applause.
Shine on brightly,
Rahad
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Profound
The thought that we also say every snowflake is unique loved how the vision captured about God knowing every heart a gift from self given to oneself...amen
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all comes frome nought and return to nought
a silent gift that is priceless
**clap* * clap* clap*
lovely words you have penned my friend
a joy...
God bless you...
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