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A Little Too Much

Just a sip of margarita maybe...
Oh, the seas are too deep and wide.

I'll make them all like sauna baths.

And perhaps a splash of vodka...
Oh, the mountains are perfect.

Just like young, perky bosoms.

Maybe a bit of wine...
Oh, the air is just too clean.

Some smoke from weeds won't hurt.

And finally a bottle of beer...
Oh, I am perfect.

Man and woman, be happy now.
The world is your playground.

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  • Envelope
    November 23, 2008

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    haha, I liked the take here, sensual and soft, but a nice bit of humor in it. If anything I wish there was more for me to say rather than well done.


  • sense surreal
    November 18, 2008

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    I love your take on this, the world is your playground, as the world is your oyster

    Enjoyed this. Clever and playful