Melancholy blues the moment
first rising under achromatic.
Shading the gloom
seasonal demise, colourless.
Skeletal branches bleak
stripped bare .
Darkness the hours
shadows the mood.
Lone reflection
companies the night.
of me..
Author notes
Behind Dull Blue Eyes
2 to 100 words
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest 15 entries less then 100 words #30 by mysticstorm.
650 points, ended November 7, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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So sad.. so amazingly written! I love this!
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very deep and slightly darker write, your talent really does astound hun, great take on the prompt. love n hugs, mil x x x
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Very deep and touching...great metaphor and strength in your words...nothing like finding those eyes in a reflection of ourselves...creative...
thank you for sharing.
mystic -
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Thank you
xx
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This is amaizng! A great entry to the contest. Well done! Best of luck to you
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a brilliant poem julie your poem reflects deep emotions and some surpurb imagery good luck in the contest my friend take care
marina
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You know, this is one of those poems you just have to let sink in. First of all, the delivery is spectacular, then there’s the masterful use of vocabulary that just sets this piece ablaze!
Very well written,
All the best,
mj.
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Superb piece, speaks volumes despite the brevity. I love the second couplet, beautiful imagery. Good luck in the contest hunni
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Mum you did an outstanding job with this one. I love it You're getting really good with the dark writes. I love lines 1-2 & 5-6. Outstanding job.
good luck
I Love You
kat
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Another one of your perfect pieces sissy. The imagery is awesome in this and suits the prompt perfectaly. Good luck...
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Beautifully done!!!
Less is more...
So much said in so few words...
Wonderfully crafted with your TM. use of imagery & visualisation of the premise...
Yet another deep & fantastic piece...
Well done!!!
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This is truly beautiful!!! You did a magnificent job writing this piece!!! I love it!!! You are truly brilliant!!
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