I keep wishing for the stars
'I'll drown in ecstasy', I say
'When I reach them'.
I thought you were all I wanted
And that our love is all we need
I thought that I could never get bored.
But when I lie awake at night
Looking at the stars above
It's so...
Lukewarm.
I drink aging wine tonight
But I've never tasted Irish whiskey
You give me autumn golds and reds
But I want summer greens
Never satisfied with all I have
Searching for something more
Something cold like shiny microphones
Or hot, like sandy beaches
Not like this.
This is just so...
Lukewarm.
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i like your poem alot. thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
"I thought you were all I wanted
And that our love is all we need
I thought that I could never get bored.
But when I lie awake at night
Looking at the stars above
It's so...
Lukewarm.
I drink aging wine tonight
But I've never tasted Irish whiskey" -
Many times life feels so lukewarm. Genius way of putting it, I've felt this alot throughout my life as have others.
Marvelous write!
♥ Kate
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a good poem, aye, i think many feel like this - they search for something then when they find it they don't care - the thrill is in the search sometimes and not the goal
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I agree what said before. Thanks again.
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Oh dear, this sounds like it's not meant to be, love should be all singing, all dancing passion and flare; where you sound grounded and deflated. Love your comparrisons and pace of the write, it all comes together nicely.
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Nice. Different. I like how you talk to us, as if trying to explain yourself at the start of the piece.
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Excellent Piece of Poetry
I really enjoyed reading your poem. It is an excellent piece of poetry. Writing about a relationship in so few lines is a great achiement in itself but you also add to this with such feeling that the reader can almost touch the unhappiness in the voice. A really excellent poem. Thankyou for sharing it with me. I wish you All Good Luck in the contest. With all my very best wishes from Rose xx
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Whoa! That was totally ripping. It caught all the emotions. That feeling of looking at the stars and drinking luke warm wine. The feeling that someone special, that one person, gives us and we can't have by ourselves. Perfectly said.
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