There will always be something separating You and I.
You are out of my league, this I cannot deny...
These emotions have got me in a dark place.
I go to my dreams just to see your face.
You are my brightest star, only that is it,
I shall never touch your body, I shall never kiss your lips.
And the one thing that matters is you know I exist-
But I've run out of genies to grant me that wish.
Oh, for your hair, and the way it lay tousled-
Oh, for your body, your skin, your muscles!
Oh, for your smile, when it was directed at me...
And Oh, for the pain, that no-one else can see.
Yes, I remember it well- that night you went out.
Smiling from the door, 'Love you!' you shout.
Reluctantly, I turned and went to my bed.
The phone ringing loudly... I heard you were dead.
Now one year on, and still sobbing as I am,
People ask me what I wish for, and I reply, My Man.
He really is my brightest star, and no-one can deny,
That the time we shared together, is time that will never die.
I Love You.
Author notes
I hope this is 'on a pedestal' enough for you...
A contest entry
- Put Him On A Golden Pedestal by Frodofan.
525 points, ended November 17, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does it have narrative credibility?
Comments
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hi there
this is a wonderful poem. it evoked sad feelings as well as hopeful feelings from me. i understand and empathise with many things in this poem.
i specifically like these parts
You are my brightest star, only that is it,
I shall never touch your body, I shall never kiss your lips.
And the one thing that matters is you know I exist-
But I've run out of genies to grant me that wish.
and also the flow/rhyme here
Reluctantly, I turned and went to my bed.
The phone ringing loudly... I heard you were dead.
congratulations on your prize, it was extremely worthy thanks for sharing
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Oh how sad. It is interesting, the way it started I thought it was just about too people from different classes and the guy wouldn't notice her. But then I realized, "out of your league" meant, no longer on this earth! Interesting piece. Very heartfelt. Thanks for entering.
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Awsome write!!!! woweeeeee I love this soo much, god you have too much talent to compete with LOL keep at the good work this is very narrative and different from what Ive seen before :-) FAB!!
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woah! yeah on a pedistal! blimy! awesome write hun! love it!
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