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b l oo d . l u s t

somewhere beneath
clavicles & breast tissue
lies the juicy artery
for which he hungers




& she's the perfect
  victim;

 

 

 


she's believed every thing he whispered

while he buried his face in the crook of her neck

and stole her identity

with every breath

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

[[NOT finished,
just jotting down an idea
that was floating around
while watching True Blood.]]

Author notes

ok, so i am looking for this to turn into a sensual, dark, erotic piece & i'd love help.

collaborations even? if you feel you have something to add then message it to me & if i like it, we can go from there.

although there are 2 members i have already added to the collaboration list because i believe they could bring some life & sensuality to this piece;
Never Fall in Love
di Autries
♥

constructive criticism always welcome :]

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Comments

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  • Horcrux.Breathing
    June 24
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    I can see this going somwere I am yearning to read the finished masterpeice

  • Bruce silver member
    February 19

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    Hmmm . . . I can see that this could be the beginning to a very good dark and erotic piece.


  • Never Fall in Love
    November 7, 2008
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    butbutbut ... I don't do sensual..


  • hks
    November 7, 2008
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    lol i am too poor to give u 3 applaus.. take 2
    :]]

  • hks
    November 7, 2008
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    :]

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