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newer realisations.

last year I read of Igbo culture
which is somewhere lost in the foliage
of Nigerian history

you narrated solemnly
and there was another end
of something people would hardly know


I smiled at the sound of it
there was an epiphany
behind each utterance.

we tried to capture tones; music
and like butterflies inside the glassjars
they slowly
died;
on our way back:
I realised how much
of a cutdown-half-gutted redwood
I was-
fleshed out of humanity
and its roots
[Igbo was just an instance
amongst millions of empty photoframes]

we both realised newer guilts.

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  • notorious
    November 9, 2008

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    "and there was another end
    of something people would hardly know"
    Adore the italicization...and BAH, this is so good; it makes me think of exclusivity.

    "I smiled at the sound of it
    there was an epiphany
    behind each utterance."
    Too good for me not to have reposted for you to see.

    "butterflies inside the glassjars"
    The non-spacing for "glassjars" is AWESOME!!! Not sure why I love it so much, but yeah.

    Last line...it's so poignantly perfect
    that you could bake pancakes with it.
    (If you don't like pancakes...well )

    So good.

    Congrats on the Gold

    Jessica


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    November 4, 2008

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    last stanza completes it beautiful
    Gorgeous write
    God bless you and congrats on the gold


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    November 4, 2008

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    I'm amazed that you got all this from that picture ~ this is just wonderful and immensely creative of you... x

  • tara wilson gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    I agree with Nicolette...this is one of your best [that I've read] I love the culture lost in a foliage of history...and the butterflies in glass jars...this is excellent.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    November 3, 2008
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    This makes me think of my cultural diversity class I'm taking...


  • Rembrandt Clarke
    November 3, 2008

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    amazing, i love this, the aesthetics are gorgeous like the photoframe line or the glassjar line... really top notch stuff,


  • nancy drew
    November 3, 2008
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    oh my gosh. i'm stunned

    helen~


  • Nicolette gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    "somewhere lost in the foliage
    of Nigerian history"

    and the last stanza - simply stunning. one of your best i've read

    ~ Nicolette


  • Cannonsfire
    November 3, 2008
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    says so much C


  • parachute fog
    November 3, 2008
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    killer last stanza.


  • Fourthaxis
    November 3, 2008

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    "and like butterflies inside the glassjars
    they slowly
    died;"
    i loved this...... as that happens to most of my memories too.

  • patrickhschan
    November 3, 2008
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    Huh? what does those to things mean?

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