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Silenced

You say that after all this time
There is still something dark
Something cold and blank
Hiding behind my eyes
That after all these years
I still hide behind my smile
But when everything
Has become so digital
What's left but to act this way?

As the time moves past me
I begin to understand more clearly
I'll never be the one you need
I'll never be able to save this world
For you
Can you hear my cries
Echoing soundlessly across my skin
I know I'll never get out of here
Chained forever to the familiar


I'll never get out of here
Not all in one piece
But this is where it starts
And sometimes I think
This it where it ends
Laying here with you
I'm writing these lines
Like we were already dead
We built this tomb together
And I won't fill it alone

 


When I reach for you
All I grasp is empty air
Floating out on my own
This fiction that lies between us
Has eclipsed all I'll ever know
I wish I could speak
Could understand what has become
But I choke on all the words
That I have never spoke
Nothing can save you from myself

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  • pelo801
    December 21, 2008

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    i really liked this one, i had to read it twice to make sure i got it all, i still don't think i did. but i think just mercedes, put it perfect about proximity giving no relief to loneliness. we all can relate to that. a lot of it seemed kinda Brian Warnerish. and i really liked that. first line, second stanza, i like the idea of you standing still and time moving by you. and also the line about everything being so digital. this line helps to add to the isolated feeling. really good.


  • just mercedes gold member
    December 21, 2008

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    This for me is a depressing statement of the modern condition. Why can't we communicate? Why does proximity give no relief from lonliness?

    Well written, good work.


  • YesterdaysDreams
    November 10, 2008

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    I thought that this write was so sweet and depressing atthe same time. Well written and conveys a silenced desperate cry to your lover to either mend or break the relationship. This gets clappies from me


  • KitLynn
    November 3, 2008
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    I LOVE this. Absolutely amazing


  • Wolfdog silver member
    November 3, 2008
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    Superb

    A very fine write, indeed. Thanks for sharing.


  • starrynight3636
    November 3, 2008

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    Really captures a sense of desperation, and the agony of modern life. The most tragic line is: "I'm writing these lines like we were already dead".
    We have to break the trap somehow and live as though we will never die!


  • Susan John Francis
    November 3, 2008
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    wow!!

  • panic-tiger-is-here
    November 3, 2008
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    I really like this Its really well written. Nice work

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