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Goodbye

If anyone would even wonder where I am
All I can say is
I’m not coming back from here
It’s all over with now
Any hands reaching to help
Are too late to find anything to grasp
There is no more substance to me
I’m just air
No I’m not suffering hell
The pain I lived would make hell seem like paradise
So no, it’s not the beginning
Nor is it the end
But I cannot pretend
That you’ll ever see me again

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  • wow. This is harsh and depressing. I really hope you don't act on it. Suicide is NOT the answer, It might feel like it at the moment, but it's not.

    Besides that, stunning sad poem.


  • Painful Memories
    December 16, 2008

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    no your not going anywhere We are in love aren't we? I shall not let you leave ayone and nothing is over if you do not want it to be...I love you Sarah


  • Titus gold member
    November 14, 2008

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    I feel you want to leave, but I cannot let you, I want you to stay, and it isn't nice to see someone leave whom you have fondnes for , so, think again, yes? Tony

  • Upkeep
    November 3, 2008

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    Is this a suicide note? Are you moving to Virginia or something? Sarah, honestly, I want to know. I haven't heard from you in a month and now this? What the hell is going on? Weren't you supposed to be happy with him? What's all this depression?


  • DeathtoloveShade gold member
    November 3, 2008
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    I thought this was interesting

    this is really sad but I loved it.

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