Tongue against tongue,
You send a ripple through my skin
As your fingers taunt with smooth caresses
And bring my senses to a startling wake
My head spins in circles around you
As breaths quicken, hot upon our necks
A kiss so deep to shatter any leftover doubts,
To sway my mind to those taunting thoughts
Where flesh against flesh is enticed by lips
And these moments could last for days it seems
Now chests are pressed together, shivering in pleasure
As we lay in silence, our bodies in tune as if we’re one
Your words settle into my consciousness
And my reply is resting heavy on the tongue,
But for tonight I think we’ll stay, melting in this heat,
And drift into the carnal satisfaction that’s clinging to our skin
Author notes
...eh... 
MelodiousDreaming
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Comments
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WOW, once again. very emotional and strong. i just love your words, they do have so much feeling.
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why are your notes eh? are you not pleased with your words?
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Well it just wasn't what I had really wanted to say..or rather, it just didn't come out properly I suppose, I versed it a bit better in my one piece, Virginity, but I mean I don't completely hate this. I think the main problem is that I wrote this in two separate parts and I think they just don't flow together so well.
Oh but thank you so much for the applause! I'm very happy you took time to read it
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very nice write, but I just wanted a little bit more from it. It was good but I enjoyed your other poem better. Nice job though. The beggining really caught me and was my favorite lines,
"Tongue against tongue,
You send a ripple through my skin
As your fingers taunt with smooth caresses
And bring my senses to a startling wake"
Thank You for entering and good luck
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Thank you again, yeah I have to agree with you....I was kinda hoping this would come out better than it did or something.... prolly didn't help that I wrote the first and second half at a complete separate time haha. Anyway, thanks again
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purty sensual
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thanks for reading and the applause ^_^
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your best write ever....
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haha, well I don't think I quite agree with that but I'm glad you liked it
Thanks so much for reading and the applause
^_^
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