painting rainbows with toes (silver) by AutumnGypsy at All poetry

She saw a world I didn’t
without lines of black and white
where shades of grey refused to grow

she painted delicate rainbows

in the sand with toes
while I kept shoes strapped on

she danced on the shore

like no one was watching
while I was afraid that they were

and she showed me more of life
than I ever believed existed

taught to truly see
by a girl who saw rainbows

~ only in the dark

Author notes

100 words or less on the contest prompt

Paint me a rainbow

A contest entry

Prompt Contest 15 entries less then 100 words #29 by mysticstorm. 650 points, ended November 18, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Like a Watercolor in the Rain (prewrites welcome) by Danna Hobart. 490 points, ended January 25, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Treasure 5
February 26

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where shades of grey refused to grow. really like that line. I know everything that grows, but I never heard of grey growing. This was a pleasure to read.
stavykm
February 8

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Loved This
Loved this light hearted poem. It is ever so sweet. Oh how I love the sand and I love rainbows and the freedom she had to dance while not even thinking anyone was watching her. The imagery is excellent and the flow and story our as well. You are such an incredible poetess. What an honor to read some of your work this evening.
So deserving of trophies.
Blessings,
Much Love,
Kelle Marie
Danna Hobart
January 24
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This is beautiful. Thank you for entering.
Lady Michaella
January 15

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wow!! this poem is absolutely amazing!!! You paint such a vivid beautiful image in my mind, and the twist at the end where it says 'only in the dark' brings a whole different thought in my mind. a meaningful sad thought. this is beautiful and touching and sad.
x
PerfectImperfection
January 9

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This piece left me with that numb tingle by the time I finished reading ... That sort of relation of the pint inside, without hindrance, whose eyes are free from the weight of this world. Beautiful thoughts here, which paint a rainbow indeed!
styrofoam
January 1
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beautiful and so inspiring (:
transit
December 16, 2008

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ooo

I love the message behind this poem and how sweetly it was sritten but with an underlying hope.

The contrast is good and it made me think of the simpler things in life. This truly deserved the silver. simple yet beautiful.

transit~
jamesbliss
December 14, 2008
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A beautiful poem, and a great closing line. I love the details!
Antebellum
December 13, 2008
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excellent write

good luck in the contest
Heath Thompson
December 13, 2008

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Well deserved of your silver. A very mindful poem, that directs the reader to a need to stop and 'see' for once - thank you! I am adding you as a favourite, simply because I want to read more of your work.
Cup-a-Joe
November 23, 2008
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This should be gold. It is superdupper fab.
Joe
Lexana
November 22, 2008
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excellent write, very well done
lunarlunacy
November 19, 2008
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A powerful closing to a strong write. Well done and congratulations.
mysticstorm
November 18, 2008

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Brilliant and creative...

Blessings,

xoxoxox

mystic
The Poetic Bandits
November 16, 2008

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Bandit Appreciation!
Thank you for participating in this weeks reading list your activity is greatly appreciated!

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Polaja
November 15, 2008

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This poem is stunning I really like the way you sum everything up in the fact that you didn't take your shoes off, but she did - the smallest things are the most telling - and you have used that to create an amazing poem - the ending was brilliant I wish you the best of luck in the contest!

Keep writing

Polly
Lady Altheia
November 11, 2008
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Ah a sister bandit! I didn't know you joined reccently! I am just now getting to all the new poems. It is a wonderful poem.
Lady Altheia
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ZachP
November 11, 2008

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your closing -- amazing
this entire poem was -- WOW!

Well done, my friend, well done.
I'm in awe of you. Good luck in the contest.
ronnica
November 11, 2008
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How matter of fact this is written, yet delicately lovely, Nice romantic imagery
Room without doors
November 10, 2008

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Outstanding
I loved this- especially the way you drew the contrast between what you saw and how she saw the world. Sometimes it takes someone elses vision of the world to strengthen our own and for me this is what this poem is about -seeing life with infinite possibilities. Over all a stunning poem with a good sense of direction and gentle imagery. Best of luck in the contest.
kiwigirljacks
November 7, 2008

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Gave me goosebumps! This is just perfect!

I choose to live my life that way too... outside the lines!
Black Rayne
November 7, 2008

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This is pure perfection,
i was completly taken by this georgous poem, it reminds me of a beautiful love i shall always cherish.
when poetry can paint vivid pictures and stir memories you were so sure had been lost, it must be something very special.
thank you for the trip down memory lane
Lady Altheia
November 6, 2008

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Hoodwinked
This is such a wonderful piece. I see there is another rainbow theme. I Love your vivid imagery. Good luck to you in the contest.
greyhaime
November 5, 2008

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I love the flow of this, and the things it brings to mind..sometimes it takes some one who only sees them in the dark to truly make them real.
well done with this. and good luck in the contest.
Grey
Manda Kathryn
November 5, 2008
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Oh! This is just perfection! No words needed!
LionessK
November 4, 2008

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Awesome. This brings so many thoughts and emotions to the surface, for me. I love your way with words.