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shooting star

She's like a shooting star he said because her soul shines with life
but as twisted and blinking as she is- shooting stars shoot out of sight

I fell for the stars in your eyes- you don't know how bad I wanted to believe in you
that you wouldn't re light my flame when I was ready to let it go out- I loved you

Shooting stars shoot across the sky - lightening that comes from outer space
changing the world in an instant but their flames don't burn forever

Author notes

I chose Option seven- phrase 3 and six

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    November 19, 2008
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    awww... so beautiful and sweet... I like that, it makes me smile like the one I love so much.