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On the outer limits

escapades and reading jack kerouac
on the beat
without exception
tantalising; visualising
bhudda's retreat
askance
a web of words; spider threads
like stars and spangled banners
O how I missed my calling
back then
and now, alas
here I am; and you
on the outer limits...

A contest entry

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  • Debbie Hansman
    November 4, 2008

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    "aweb of words; spider threads
    like stars and spangled banners"

    I liked how you used those words.

    I have to say that this write is somewhat differernt from what I have read so far....but I did enjoy reading your words.

    Thank youfor entering & Good luck!

    debbie

  • poets whisper silver member
    November 3, 2008

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    I hope this wins something! It has great imagery and the rhyme or style or whatever it is, is awsome.