When the fiercely cruel girls tried to make me crumble
I plastered a smile to my face and pretended not to care.
When they tore everything away from me to make me humble
I stood up tall and was proud that I smiled through my tears.
I wanted to run- I wanted to fall-
because of you I still stood tall
I wanted them to leave me alone- for the pain to end
but I couldn't say let go because I needed to be your friend
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You were a continent a way until I finally came home
Eight months of memories later - good bye meant being alone
If I had truly had to watch you walk away from me ,never coming back
Then I would have been broken, falling and unable to stand
If there was no way you could have let me in again, too hurt and too sad
There would be no reason to be proud- not what I'd planned
Actually able to do my homework, not distracted because you wouldn't call
Going to sleep at a normal time because we wouldn't talk for hours
Wouldn't get my phone confiscated not wanting to hang up- trying to stall
My favorite shows would be painful to watch because no longer ours
Heart bleeding crystal tears that would freeze and never shatter
A silent pain that only you would understand but I wouldn't be talking to you anymore
noticing the things you notice would be way too painful to even matter
You're a part of who I am and I'm afraid it will kill me inside if I have to shut that door
You once told me that if I pushed you in a pool you had to pull me in too
because we belonged together and thats how we always would be
Best friends forever because I'm someone I don't know or like without you
Saying goodbye for good would mean the person I am is no longer me
I almost had to say goodbye- it almost wasn't enough-us holding on together
You asked me to stop fighting for you so you could actually think
I gave of my last weeks with you knowing I might end up losing you forever
Today - good bye to us would take the ground from beneath my feet
Author notes
Option 7 a-friendship.. what good bye would mean
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this is so very strong. i have been that girl. the last line has a spacing error. thank you for sharing it with me today and i wish you the best of luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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good job
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wow this is a very good poem you did a wounderful job expressing it i really like the part I wanted to run- I wanted to fall-
because of you I still stood tall
I wanted them to leave me alone- for the pain to end
but I couldn't say let go because I needed to be your friend
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Good job and good luck in the contest.
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strong, brave voice
Very evocative of hurt and loss of someone loved. Personal, and loaded with so much meaning, hinting at a story much larger than the poem encompasses. Best of Luck.
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I know this pain myself, found msyelf at this crossroads only about a year ago. It's agonising to say the least.
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I love this poem. Flows nicely but with a couple errors. "If I had truly had to watch ". This does not sound right. It should be more like "If I had to truly watch". But that is my opinion. The paragraph taht starts out saying "Heart bleeding crystal tears that would " you should trying shortning that whole paragraph up so if fits on 4 lines instead of 6 lines. I love the lines
"I wanted to run- I wanted to fall-
because of you I still stood tall". That sounds so nice and flows perfectly. I do like this poem a lot and I give you 2 thumbs up. You captured a lot about ending stuff with good friends. I am going through something similar with my best girlfriend. It is close to ending. But bravo. Good Job. O and change the word "of" in the 2nd to last line to "up" -
Awesome write!! I could almost imagine, feel, the stanza:
Actually able to do my homework, not distracted because you wouldn't call
Going to sleep at a normal time because we wouldn't talk for hours
Wouldn't get my phone confiscated not wanting to hang up- trying to stall
My favorite shows would be painful to watch because no longer ours
Can relate. And the last stanza was simply heart wrenching, having to say goodbye....but it was very good with the emotions. Great job. Keep writing ya!! Cheers!!
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Thanks , I''m glad that you could feel the emotion in it. Thank god, she and I are best friends to this day and are closer because of it. WE got stronger1
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wow!
im at a total loss for words here..
i don't actually know what to say..
the last few lines had me thinking to myself is the person talking for me ?
i'm still saying wow.
I'm totally lost in your poem here.
i am so glad you shared this . thank you so much for sharing this. Good luck in the contest.
-Mandi
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Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! She and I are best friends today so we didn't lose each other. We are at different schools but we have managed to keep in touch though recently we haven't talked in a while..
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