In streams of being lives untwist
as threads that connect us in love.
As I stand now fully in midst,
my eyes will raise to heights above.
a glow embraces a spirit pure
that I have come to know and trust.
In light that licks I know rapture
in heat of fire, I now, combust.
This oneness that I seeked now lives
as us and thrives in knowing bliss.
United eternal, what now thrives
all began, sprung from heaven's kiss.
A puckered petal in lightest graze
has set this funeral pyre ablaze
A contest entry
- Men Only by Amera.
2000 points, ended November 3, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - loosing a loved one by karas.
400 points, ended November 25, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like it it is reallu good very lovley.
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Oh, a fine piece here, indeed, and one that I'm certain fired up the broadest smile from the incomparable and luscious Amera!!!
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This is a beautiful little sonnet that you put your personal mark on, ablaze with passion and heat but also having a spiritual theme. Very good!
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wow truly magnificent. in such a short piece you have captivated me my friend. and i have A.D.D. so that is not an easy task haha very nice work. you are a cunning linguist for sure
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I had to relook at it!
and realize what you see is true. There is a subtle allusion to oral sex here. What a great call you made on seeing that one.
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Wow a beautiful write. Loved it.
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A fantastic piece. You really told a story with this write. Thank you for sharing this with us!!
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Beautiful...
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this is TJMUSEPAL agai -well i 'm saying that this dancing animation is also a conveyor of emotions -and can surely invite a mere harmless affinity or even a productive sensuality .I don't think you can survive without wrings or engae your anatomy and physiology an those organs that will enable inherent elasticity of God 's endowed portal for you-and human folks -within your field of wooing or worl d o feminity.
I - ALSO OPINE THAT WOMEN -NO MATTER THEIR LEVEL OF BEAUTY OR LIBIDO MARVEL OR TOURNAMENT PROFILE -DON'T NEED TO HARRASS OR EROTISE MEN BY dress or body part exposure -naturally their voiice can do that.How much more in a liberal democratic socirites -where freedom of speech -including harmless polite toast toasting is permiitted.
CAN I KNOW YOUR NAME PLEASE?
jUST AS MEN CAN PICK UP ANY RELEVANT OR INSIGNIFICANT nothing to chat up a woman -women are also boundlessly powerfully emdowed to capture a man's emotional sensuality without undue artificial erotism..
IMAGINE the countris or regions of the world that cer their women or tacitly ostracise them from city or village glare or urban 's potpouri,luculian scenes etc -tey still produce babies copiously -how by making love .WOMEN SHOULD JUST USE THEIR BIOLOGY -NOT ARTIFICIAL BEAUTY ARDORNMENTS TO SEEK OR PROVOKE ATTENTION,ATTRACTION OR AFECTION..
SOME CAN 'T SURVIVE A MINUTE OR A DAY WITHOUT WOMEN 'SVOICE OR WOMAN IN THEIR BOSOMS!
AND VICE VERSA -THIS IS ALSO A VALID VIEW-WORLD WILD in love so to speak.
Men and women are mutually emotional healers -i wont say dependants as such -
Your symbolic juxtapositions are enriching and democratising poetry beyond the theoreticians and podium artists - works of the mind beyond comprehension or appreciation or visual delight..
You re blessed -you ve found your inner and exterior joy and your admirers are ever waiting for more..
How elated you will be online? and intellectually productive offline -or again do you live on the cyberspace?
Yes many like YOU ARE BATHERING E-POPULATION FOR A GLOBAL REPUBLIC..
TJMUSEPAL,040209,3.40AM -
ENDS OF THE UNIVERSE IS POETIC-THE HEART ICON WILL HELP REDUCE THE TRANSLUCENCY OF THE POEM TO MANY READERS-
NOTICE WELL A DIFFICULT TO FANTOM OR DISSECT LINE
in heat of fire,
i now,combust
she continued the mystic
confession-
(oneness that i sought
now lives in us and
thrives in knowing
bliss,
United eternal,
what now thrives
all began,sprung from
heaven's kiss.
Who knows precisely what the poet intends to divulge by the heaven ' kiss -could be cell death or superabundant favour that triggered the author to a high ponit of hilarity or nirvana -pure fulfillment or a state of spiritual contentment and complete cricification of his/her senses or hedonic tastes ofwhich the internet digital age and opulent enterprise have brought to homo sapiens in the 21st Century -and sphistication enlarges endlessly and who knows if genuine or purity increases tangentially too?
But evidently presently i dont ther won't be a mapping of co-existence or benign development threshold that will justify the meaning of life rayther than mere aesthetics of high tech.
POETRY WILL CONTINUE TO PHILOSOPHISE NOT EXCLUSIVELY TO PODIUM WRITERS ONLY BUT ALSO TO ATRONAUTS,DIVERS, SHOE COBBLERS,POLITICAL POETS,LOVE POETS,PSALMISTS..WITH THE PEDESTRIAN PACE OF WORLD WISDOM IN TACKLING DEVELOPMENT PROBLEMATIQUE -WILL THERE BE AN END TO FETCHERS OF WATER AND HEWERES OF WOOD IN ANY PART OF THE GLOBE.
I DONT THE SKY AS WELL AS PLANET EARTH ISN'T THE LIMIT OF SERIOUS,ARTISTIC,,POETRY OR LAMENT.MAYBE WHEN CIVILISATION BECOME MORE SOPHISTICATED ,LESS ETHICAL,LESS COMPASSIONATE,LESS POETIC IN VALUES AND LESS SPIRITUAL- LOVE -A MIGHTY ENGINEER WILL BE THE NEXT FANCY OF MAN TO WORSHIP- AND I DOONT MEAN LIBIDO LOVE.IN FACT PHYSICAL LOVE ISN'T A BORING ROUTINE TO SOME PEOPLES OF THE WORLD.THE INDIANS ARE NOTED FOR GODESS OF LOVE THE GREEKS TOO . THE FRENCH AND AMERICANS AR UNIQUE FOR THEIR PECULIAR KISS.YET IN THESE LIBERTY HABITAT THERE ARE A LOT WHO DONT LIKE SEXUAL LOVE AND SOME CELEBRATE IT -EVEN UNABASHLY NOISILY ON THEIR LOVE BEDS.
WHEREAS IN SOME PARTS OF AFRICA -THE LOVE OR SEXUAL CULTURE IS SO REVERED ,SACRED -NOT TO TALK ABOUT EVEN WITHIN LOVERS THERE ARE BOUNDARIES OF CONFESSIONAL PLEASURE OR DISCLOSURE OF ORGASM -OR PLEASURE SUPPLY REQUEST PER SE!
THOUGH MOST CHRISTIIANS- PENTECOSTALS AND TO A LARGE EXTENT CATHOLICS TOO ARE POPULARISING BOUNDLESS SEX CULTURE WITHIN WEDLOCK ,OF COURCE -AND DENIALOOOOOBY EITHR SPOUSE MEANS A BIG TABOO OR REQUEST FOR JUSTIFIED ATTRITION..
POETS ROLE IS ENDLESS IN A WOLRD OF GOOD OR BAD ,DOS OR DONTS PURE OR IMPURE RELIGION,STRICT OR SALACIOUS SEXUAL PRACTICES -OR BLOGGING PER SE.Even a 50 -panelists-priest sstudy of teenage sex-premature coital unions years back in the USA also attested that almost everywhere in the villages and cities sex is one single aspect of man/woman that -restraint to taste it will convoke a vigilance or councelling of parents,teachers peers,the multimedia have worsened tradtional purity everywhere and hasnt helped to stop forncation or free sex or catalysed the permissive era.
The WORLD BANK SEX SCANDAL AND ADULTS SIMILAR CRIMES HERE OR THERE HAVE NOT HELPED TO PREACH THE GOSPEL OF NEAT MARITAL SEX.-IT HAS ONLY ADORNED THAT THIS IS A GOOD GIFT OF GOD TO TASTE.POETS ARE ATUBIQUITOUS LIBERTY NOT ONLY YO POETISE LOVE ,LOVING,NECKING,NEEDING,PINNING,PROCREATING OR RECREATING WITH THIS BIOLOGICAL AGREEMENT VIA OPPOSITE GENITALIA...ITS AMAZING THAT WHETHER YOU 'RE A PRIEST,PASTOR,PROF,OR POET SEX IS N'T ALL THAT NEAT WHEN IT COMES TO PARTNERSHIP.
PALPABLY -ITS GLOBALLY CULTURALLY ODD TO MAKE OVE TO YOUR DAUGHTER OR ANOTHER SPOUSE OUTSIDE YOUR WEDLOCK-OR UNDER-AGED GIRLS -or again force or harrass grown ups that have been agitating your genitals or sexual cerebrals but i actually detest making love to animals as more of homo-phobia -or philologists should find me the word for those that repel their species totally.
AS FOR INDULGENCE OR PREMATURITY IN SEXUAL DEALINGS -VIA HOTEL PHONE NUMBERS AND CURRENT STRATEGIC MICOWAVE MINGLING METHODS OF SEXUAL PARTNERS -I DONT THINK ANY HUMAN BEING HOWEVER INORDINATELY SEXY CAN'T BECOME A PROTEAN NORMAL SEXIST AGAIN.SOME CAN BE CHANGED BY THE HOLY SPIRIT -OUR ETERNALCOMFORTER -WHO ALSO CONVICTS PAUL WHEN HE WAS PERSECUTING CHRIST'S PEOPLE AND LATER TURNED APOSTLE OF CHRIST! -in all its ramifications evident in his truthful poetry -
dead to flesh
its better to marry than to burn ..and lessons of those who -through their sexual indiscipline proved that women are men's woe.ARE THEY TRULY SO -or is it our biology?
CAN POETS MODERATE SEXUAL PASSIONS
YES KEEP THE MUSING GOING
TJMUSEPAL 3.46AM 04020
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re:dark otter -what attracts her/him to magical imagery? is it because of her affinity for surrealist works? however i have read much of her works at ALL POETRY BUT I APPRECIATE HER/HIS INNER PERMISSION AND POSSIBLY A FACILE FECUNDITY TO RELEASE VISSION,T
errata; i meant to write i HAVEN'T READ much of her love or erotic poems to comment more holistic than hitherto done in the brief already submitted few minutes ago.I still uphold my virginial initial comment on dark otter upn clicking THE ENDS OF THE UNIVERSE.eVIDENTLY HER HOME PAGE DEPICT HER HOMELINESS WITH METAPHYSICAL IMAGES.oNLY POETS WHO 'RE WITH PEACE ON WATCHING OR READING FANTASY STORIES ESPECIALLY IN DEVELOPING COUNTRIES WHERE ARTISTIC CULTURE DIDNT START WITH literati per se but tradional ritual arts more mystical in form or ceremonies or manifestations than any other magic you can witness or perceive since birth.This is the reality in Black africa.Ther's a lot poetry in festivals appeasing or mere adorning deities or orishas or gods yearly or as a religious mandate or communion.UNESCO -GENERAL ASPECTS ON CULTURE BY OLA BALOGUN ET AL EXPOSED THESE ADDIONAL OR ROUTINE SOURCE OF MYSTERY,METAPHYSICS AND MAYBE YOU WILL SAY -INTERMINABLE RAW MATTER FOR SURRELISM.
I GUESS THIS KIND OF BOYHOOD UNFORGETTABLE EXPERIENCE COUPLED WITH HIS TRAINING IN THEATRE ARTS FIRED WOLE SOYINKA,NOBEL LAUREAT,1986 TO TRANSLATE FOREST OF A THOUSAND DEMONS -ORIGINALLY WRITTEN BY D.O.FAGUNWA AN ELDERLY FOREMOST NOVEST WRITING IN THE VERNACULAR.
In the interim of reading more of DAR OTTER OR ALLIED STYLE POETS -ALMOST ALL WORKS FROM ALLPOETRY ARE ADORNED IN HEAVY GRAPHICS I THINK THIS ARTISTIC PECULIARITY OR SPLENDOUR SHOULD CONTINUE.I REMEMBER THE 1ST POEM I UPLOADED IN 2001 OR 2 2004 -IT WAS INSTANTLY SENT BACK TO BE DRESSED IN PHOTOSHOP.THAT WAS THE REASON FOR MY ATTRISION OR SHALL I SAY RETICENCE FROM allpoetry.com since!
I love to see poetic thoughts dressed with graphical respectability possible.Poetry deserves all the best visual ador,splendor and vigor we can give it -otherwise other arts will keep it under aesthetic carpet -whereas most of the audio -viseo arts use poetry primordially and dynamically too to be meaningful or portray a less veterinary entertainment to a local or global audience.INSPIRE AFRICA PERFORMANCES STAGEDIN LAGOS BEAMED ON NTA IS A CASE IN POINT OF DIVERSE ARTISTS FROM ALL OVER THE WORLD DISPLAYING THEIR TALENT VIA HIP -HPOS,DANCE SKETCHES,BLUES,TRADIONAL JAZZ,FOLKLORES ETC-PURPOSELY CONNVENED TO RAISE FUNS FOR STREET CHILREN. I LOVE EVERY MOMENT OF THE PERFORMANCE.
NB.I 'M STILL TO VISIT OR READ MORE OF dark otter poems- just provoked by her home page salacious yet WILD TAPESTRY OF POSES AND BOLD PICTORIAL OF FEMINIE ASSETS -WHICH ALSO DESERVE WONDER BEYOND LIBIDO AND PRO - CREATIVITY.
P.S ANOTHER THING IS ACCESS TO ORGANISED BLOGS CONTENT.
WHEN I 'M THOROUGHLY INURED IN MEMBERS POEMS READING & REVIEWS I WILL BE ABLE TO KICK OFF ON allpoetry site itself...
expect me always when i 'm not musing or commenting on literary works from poets or writers of poems (apology to ROBERT GRAVES) I DON'T THINK I 'M NOT IN LOW SPIRIT.I TREASURE BEING IN POETRY OR WITH ALLPOETRY
THEN YOU WILL EXPECT ME TO SAY GOODBYE OR BADBYE..
TJMUSEPAL,04022009.33AM
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Nobly Said... nice write -Jake
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Very cute and lovey...I liked it. :]
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wow
wow this good i am coming back for me of you poems this is great i love it
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Great stuff!!!
Intriguing narrative, bouncy rhyme scheme & some wonderful word choices...
Another profound & fulfilling write...
Well done!!!
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A glorious love poem that sets one's heart ablaze. This is wonderfully written. Thank you for sharing.
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Liked the presentation you have made on this page - the picture, sidebar and colors used. Good flow, rhythm and rhyme as well.
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Oh my
This was very interesting and caught me by surprise
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nice write for the prompt . . warmly expressed . . well done !!
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deep
you do have a real sense of the whole... i liked this poem very much.
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JUST BEAUTIFUL.......I LOVE THE DEEP EMOTIONS
YOU CAPTURED WITHIN THESE VERSES...EXCELLENT POEM........NOVY
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Thank you, ennvoy
The funny thing is didn't even place in its original contest.
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A lovely write. Heartfelt. Deep expression
of emotion. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Nice
imagery. Delightfully sensual. Very nice rhythm.
Well penned. Thanks for sharing.
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hi!!!!!!
the imagery in this poem is absolutely wodnerful. it relly truly almost jumps offf the page and right at you, doesn't it!!?!?!!
the picture is absolutely captivating and almost haunting in itself. excellent choice, i hope that was ur inspiration to write this!!!!!!
i love the puckered petal part. greattttt use of alliteration and had a nice imagery to it alsooo.
i like the use of the word ablaze too. it gives a nice and powerful end to this excellent piece.
well done and pleeeeease keep writing!!!! u are really talented
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thumbs up
A puckered petal in lightest graze
has set this funeral pyre ablaze
stunning -
Love the mystic theme
I Love the mystic theme of this poem
I mean who could possibly find more happiness
then becoming one with the Divine . I thought the third stanza just totally rocked . It was my favorite part of the poem
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Very Impressive
As a person who rarely writes about love I enjoyed the poem. It displays a sensitivity I donot possess.
Good write and happy trails.
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wow! this poem is amazing.
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This was really beautiful, such soft emotion expressed in this write. you did such a wonderful job with this poem. It showed love and passion.. Beautiful.. Thank you very much for sharing.
Angel
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Thanks!
I do a romantic writes once in a blue moon. I appreciate the acknowledgement from you. Hope your writing is going well for you!
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A puckered petal in lightest graze
has set this funeral pyre ablaze
shivers well done my friend
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So so beautiful...I adore the feeling a sonnet brings to a poem. I know this feeling all too well. Love really does take us on a most amazing journey.
Good luck in the contest with this beautiful write...it left me sighing at the end.
Love ~sweetness~ xxx
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This is outstanding, I love this love poem. You can feel the heat as it melts the coldest of hearts.
Riftkin
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Thanks for weighing in!
All my friends stopped by and gave love. I appreciate!
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Oh wow! A love poem with some real heat! I really enjoyed this contempoary sonnet. The rhyme and flow are wonderful and so few love poems have this original theme. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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I agree with Penman..who is a brillant writer and poet,
this was truly lovely..and we all ......sighed in it's beauty...
feeling the texture of that lovely ......k iss
your ink feasts this prompt tenderly!
ears/Seattle
what a pleasure to enjoy!
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Wonderful
What a great use of the form. so very well crafted. Best of luck in the contest.
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