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Another Door Closes

Missing image
when you seek the shadows
I will no longer be there
every movement emphasis's
another moment stripped

Stumbling through darkness
my hands can't find a hold
Plummeting faster, free falling
visions of past cycle about

what was, what is, what could be
no longer exists behind closed doors
the dark abyss is around another
corner, closing you in, keeping life out

blood rises within the inner shell
gurgling abounds from within
executions taking place tonight
as another door is closing

Heart and soul can't be touched
the door has been dead bolted shut
Emotions and feelings no longer exist
they have been swallowed by the great abyss.

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  • Sanguinarius
    November 3, 2008

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    Emotions captured brilliantly and put into words, Excellent write my dear ~Bret~


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 3, 2008
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    Sad and soulful, a great take on the prompt and beautifully worked. Great stuff.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    November 3, 2008

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    It seems you have dug deep into your feelings for the words in this piece. I think so many people can relate to this.
    Great job.
    Love
    Soulful Woman


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 3, 2008

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    a dark poem that i can honestly relate to on some many levels at this point in my life, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • The Drifter
    November 2, 2008
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    A dark, hard write--
    Spells the situation
    to a "T"--no questions here.
    Good job.


  • Grey Mouser
    November 2, 2008

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    Great take on the prompt. I looked and hadn't a clue where to take it. You found a way to express such emotion in this that one could feel the emptiness taking hold. Well done and best to you sis.

    Mouser


  • Arkbear gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    One of your best writes......so good to see your soul speaking out.....God bless you and good luck!

     

    Bear ~


  • redhanded
    November 2, 2008

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    wow. very very nice write you have here. there is alot of emotion and some good ideas placed forth here. I really enjoyed this piece very much, and I believe that your take on the prompt was incredible. thank you for entering. and best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
    andi
    (redhanded)

  • GoneToo
    November 2, 2008

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    I could really feel this one, so much emotion embedded in your words. A great take on the picture with a nice flow to your words. Powerful expressions here that read very convincingly. But don't shut that door just yet. There's some of us that want to be on the other side with you.



    • PassionsPromise gold member
      November 2, 2008
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      s thank you. I know it to be true, but right now my heart hurts so bad. You know, well, doesnt matter. Thanks meforaminute for your tender words.

      Appreciate you!

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