With entrance always fashionably late,
Her scent premieres on warm October breeze;
Her laissez faire perfume does captivate-
A blend of heated soil and drying leaves.
So fervid are the hues of her attire,
So delicate the fringes of her gown;
The sun retreats, advancing her retire,
Her autumn sari slowly drifting down;
Her essence welcome late into the night,
A tranquil salmon sunset on her cheek;
Her stellar wink and cheshire smile delight,
Enough to make me hesitate to speak;
I wish to fall asleep upon her sleeve,
To linger with my indian summer eve.
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Author notes
I didn't take the picture that I have with this poem, but it has what I saw that I was trying to write about.
I was driving home from work the other evening, after having an unusually warm, late October day, and the sun was setting... and I looked over and saw a crescent moon, and just above it was either a star, or it may have even been a planet! The sky was a beautifully fading rainbow, mostly orange-red... and I just had to try to write about it.
It was gorgeous... I really need to invest in buying a digital camera! 
Do you know where you're spending eternity? If not, ask me how you can know!
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Beautiful metaphors that enhance the imagery so well. Great Write. God Bless, Jo-Ann
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A nicely crafted sonnet. Beautiful imagery. I believe the last line is 11 syllables though. I will reread again before judging. Thank you for entering.
Sam
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I checked the dictionary...
... and it listed "indian" as a two-syllable word. I guess it's one of those words like "hour"- it rolls off your tongue with an extra syllable, but the laws of english intervene when using it in written form.
At any rate, I enjoyed writing it, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading it!
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I attempted to correct it... but I must say that I'm not too keen on the word "injun."
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Would it work without the "my" or maybe a synonym for linger. Nonetheless, your piece is beautiful.
You asked if all sonnets were ten syllables, no they are not. Check the descriptions at shadow poetry.
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I just changed it back... it just didn't feel right.
Such is life.
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good for you!!!!
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