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Simple


Simple, really,
Seems like yesterday,
midnight fairy tale.
Yes, charming,
spaghetti sauce.
Hold me, kiss me,
remember the sunset?
Seashells in sand bottle,
starfish in unused fish tank.
Miss me? Already?
Where's the magic pumpkin?
Oil painting,
dripping of my charm,
so you said. Sarcasm much.
Play "Moonlight Sonata"
for this year's anniversary.
Of course,
I'll dance with you.
All night for 50 years.


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  • vampireblood
    November 11, 2008

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    I agree with Frodofan, it does seem a little rough for me to. It's not a bad piece, I like it. Moonlight Sonata is actually one of my favorites.
    Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.

    Vampy


  • Frodofan silver member
    November 2, 2008

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    It reads a little rough to me, almost as if english isn't your first language. I like the seemingly personal images in it though.

    Thanks for entering.