Cutting;
God be witness
to my disturbing cries
as blood boils hot inside my veins
and tears run barren forever contained.
Give me death or release my pain.
There is no other way;
cannot stop from
cutting.
Author notes
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P A L O S Z O O
36. Ok this may seem odd but I am a cutter and I would like to know what drives the rest of you cutters to do so. Please let me know in a poem why you cut what drives you how it feels and your thoughts behind it.
In a list
A contest entry
- food for thought- ♥- cutters, noncutters, and ex-cutters by Immortal Obscurity.
875 points, ended November 10, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This was a really good poem. I like how in a few words, you can explain self-harm. I also like the format. It's easy on the eyes. I like the words you used. You didn't use, "knife" and words like that. Those words are most likely words you will see in almost all poems about self-harm. Not that it's a bad thing. But, the point is, you didn't use words like that and used a whole different set of words. It's different, basically. I get this image that every time you would hurt yourself, it was like you were crying to God. That was your way to communicate with him. I really liked that the most about your poem. That image I got from reading it.
This breaks my heart to say this, because it is a very good poem, but I can't add you to the finalist because you won a trophy already for this poem. And the rules clearly state that I don’t allow entries that won a trophy already. I really am sorry. But, if you have any other poems about self-harm that have not won anything, you should add them. I really am sorry though.
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I liked this poem, thought it was an intreresting take on the prompt and very well written.
Well done and good luck.
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i understand what you are talking about once you start to cut it is really hard to stop
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First I do commend you for being able to create a brilliant rictameter from this subject and still keep it tastefully done without promoting the issue. Very impressive.
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This was a good rictamemter - I thought the form was spot on and this topic was kind of cool to read in a formed - defiantly far from the norm!
I thought that the imagery was there - but I didn't quite get a lot of emotion from it, personally. I still thought it was up there with the better of cutting poems.
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This is a beautiful poem, it does not promote or glamourize, only tells the truth and expresses the pain and need to cut so well for such a short poem.
I love it, really well written
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This brings tears to my eyes
For honey if I was near to help you stop this I would run a mile and hold you untill you only felt love no pain no loneliness no regrets you see not once have you cut and it all went away I beg of you anytime you feel this way message me and if need be we shall talk all night for honey the only way to release the pain is to get a notebook and you write in that notebook everything that comes to your mind when you feel like cutting .When you cant think of another thing then you sit and slowely read what you have written and for each page read you tare it up in tiny pieces and go to the next page .When you are all through them then get yourself up and take you a really hot shower and know from that moment on you are clean and not anything can change it from that moment on .You have thrown out everything that has hurt you for so long believe me it works I do hope you see it through I love you honey please try this for me and you
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This again is a stunning write, for all those people who hurt themselves..and are depressed..Lovely read!
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Oh, dear...
This is amazing, though for the worst reasons. The pain within these words is raw and real, and your language is exquisite. Thank you so much for entering my humble little contest
Best wishes,
Laura
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